Ha ha. This was pretty good. I liked the story and the concept, and characterization was decent. It was realistic the way Mustang and Hughes kind of talked to each other and didn't share everything with Al, and the nurse was a nice OC. I noticed some of your descriptions were a bit odd, though - you often used the noticeable words "bespectacled" and "obsidian," and it kept drawing attention away from the story itself. Perhaps you could use more variation. But I enjoyed it.

Great job! XD

lol, loved it.

This is excellent! Everyone is in character and Huges and Mustang's discussions are priceless! xD

Wonderful! I love parental Roy/Ed; it's just as exciting as anything. This was very well-written, and I enjoyed every bit of it :)

Hughes' last line was pretty funny XD

why should roy find a wife when he now has the full time job has a father of two you can't take one in without the other

That was really sweet! I absolutely loved it!

Great characterization, grammar, spelling... everything!

Though you could possibly continue the story, I like this ending. It's very satisfying :)

Aw! I really liked this; it made me coo at my computer. XD

“Fullmetal… I hope you know that I am never having children of my own because of you.”

Ah, so cute. XD

I like it. The general feel was appropriate and I found both Roy and Maes to be very in character.

That was really cute! Bravo!