RAWR UPDATE!

why does hinata have brown eyes?

You did well in showing what happens when a person is inexperienced in dealing with the Sharingan. I looking forward to seeing how he deals with it being on constantly.

Does no one remember at all that Hinata used to be a Hyuuga? Also what is causing her eyes to stay brown?

I liked how you included Haku. It makes sense that he would remain faithful to the person who saved him.

I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.

I really liked how you drew parallels between Sasuke and Hinata's lives. I also liked how you had their lives differ from what occurred in canon. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.

Interesting 2 chapters! Keep up the good work!

I'd love it to be a Haku x Hinata x Sasuke. That would be *thumbs up*. :]

thats very interesting so far.:)

I'm pretty surprised Haku is in the story considering Haku and Hinata never meet but this is fanfiction and I can't exactly complain. Especially since Sasuke and Hinata have no interaction in the manga and anime :P But anyways, I think it's an interesting idea for Haku to be one of Hinata's old...can I say patient (?) and friend. It's definitly not something you'd expect and I can't wait until what happens next. Considering Sasuke and Hinata were ditched from their original families there isn't going to be any generic scenes. The lives you made up for Hinata and Sasuke are completely different from their actual ones and I can't wait to see what unfolds from this story.

I can't exactly criticize but I am actually surprised that the two of them met up so soon in the story. I know they have to meet up eventually if anything is going to happen relationship-wise but I thought if they met up later then there would be some mystery. Like if Hinata goes into the Uchiha manor to find Sasuke leaving. Whatever, too late for that :P Anyways, I thoroughly enjoyed the chapter considering I've been waiting for an update for this story for a while (but no pressure!) and I think it was a great way to end my day. Keep up the great work! I think your style of writing is wonderful.

This was so well done, how you incorporated so much originality into their personal feelings and growth. Different circumstances made them grow differently and, as a result, they have developed different beliefs from the ones canon so explicitly shows. And yet, you have still managed to capture the essence of Hinata, the essence of Sasuke.

You've written them so well. Your style of writing conveys so much in so little words. I love the transitions and the brief looks on how both have grown. It's really the little things that make up the big picture. I loved this and really do hope that you continue it :)

This is really good. Please update soon.

I love this so far! It's beautifully written and in a weird way, Im glad Sasuke was disowned by his family instead being the only survivor. It's creative. Except I cant help but feel bad for the guy. And Hinata.

wow. loved it. pwease update soon!

this is very good! oyu should keep writeing the story especially what happen when they first saw eachother...the emotion the scene is very good

Yeah.

I'm definately liking this.

I like the style of this. Short straight to the point sentences.

And the short scenes give a lot more insight to the characters than I thought they would.

Keep updating!

This sounds like a very interesting start. Now I am curious whether their families were being cruel or could read the writing on the wall and were trying to protect the members they could (since Sasuke and Hinata wouldn't have been identifiable, and thus wouldn't be persecuted with the rest of them). Can't wait to see what you're planning to do with it.