Please update ASAP. You've completely left us hanging and I can't wait to find out what happens.

Well, not sure if I like how quick everyone was to blame Alan. Even if they didn't know it was Alan. The kid was careless but he never meant to hurt anyone else. AND if they had paid attention to him like they should have, it would have never happened in the first place.

You are going from strength to strength with this story - and it rattles along nicely, due to all the exciting events, change of viewpoints etc. Well done!

You could benefit from printing out your work, checking it on the hard copy and correcting some minot errors - but apart from that - just keep on writing. You are doing a geat job and this is shaping up to be one of the best stories on the "movie" part of Thunderbirds fanfiction. It's a pity someone decided to split the fandom into "tv" versus "movie" as stories like yours can be overlooked.

Hey, FMC! I did notice some mistakes that I think we both missed, or it could've been pushing the words together... But I don't believe they were there before...

CLiff hangers are: a) Annoying as hell; b) fun as hell to write; c) really, really evil.

OMG OMG! You can't stop there!! please update ASAP! I really can't wait to read more of this story! XD

PS I'm sure Alan will feel really guilty about the death of the kid on the bus...he didn't deserve that!! Poor baby!

great chapter! XD

Reviewing as requested. Great first story! I can see you put a lot of thought into it. Grammar and layout is good, plot & characterisation too. I think the dialogue could be improved a tad. My best tip is to try reading things out loud to hear how natural they sound. Other than that I think you've done a great job for a first chapter. I want to read more please. When's the next chapter coming up??

O...Cliffy...you're mean:) I can't wait to see what happens,and if Alan will be okay! And what about the kid who died! That is awful,but you've got me hooked:) Write soon!

Your Fan,
Pixie P.

so good. can't wait to read next chapter.

Nice start to the story - I like the way you show Alan as a normal teenager, with hopes and dreams - but still young enough to be a bit self-centered - in an understandable way.
Poor Jeff - I do feel sorry for the poor man, with all the rescues and the family traumas as well - no wonder he is exhausted!

Hi there this is a very promising story and would like to read more. Sorry to all those who love Alan but i love Alan angst. Would it be possible for you to clarify the ages of the boys for me - is it just after the movie? are they older?
Thanks Jo

no alan! don't do it! oh my god, i can just see this going all wrong, can't wait to find out what happens, update soon!

blacky xox

This was really good. I hope you post the next chapter soon.

Oh poor Alan! I knew he was going to do something like that! I hope he won't have problems woth Tracy One! And I'm sure Jeff and the boys will feel really guilty about it! They totally ignored their youngest member on his birthday! poor Alan!

Wow! I loved this story! I can't wait to read more. Write soon! You can't serously be thinking about leaving us hanging like that! Thats just not nice:( Anyways, Loved it! Write soon!

Your Fan,
Pixie P.

It was sad how often that kid would fall at the bottom of the family's priority. It wasn't just Jeff. All of them are guilty of it.