Reviews for Friend, Mentor, Soulmate
ILikeComps 11/30/09 . chapter 7
Good chapter and the will reading was pretty uneventful. Thanks for sharing!
Cateagle 11/30/09 . chapter 7
A fun chapter and I love the banter that's going back and forth above the heads of all but a few there.
michaelc100 11/30/09 . chapter 6
great story so far

loved it
The PhantomHokage 11/23/09 . chapter 6
Another nice chapter so will you have a lemon in your next chapter or no just curious anyway seems like a good story and am sure it's going to be hard on those two not to show they care for each other or married I think you should add in a couple of times that Ginny tries to flirt with Harry making Tonks jealous and Harry well he would just be in a aquared situation I think you can do something similar with Tonks if you like a guy from the order or some shit tries to hit on Tonks making Harry jealous just idea's though do things like you want
The PhantomHokage 11/23/09 . chapter 5
Great chapter kinda thought something like that would happen with the soul rings well I thought Sirius would do something that made the two get married so they going to have a honeymoon though it will be hard since they will want to keep their marrage a secret
Reader458 11/21/09 . chapter 6
Great story.

Some of the clichees, (like the Nym true form scene)could have been presented more smoothly, but the concept is intruiging. I look forward to see more of this.

Good luck with the writing

Reader458
brigrove 11/21/09 . chapter 6
Nice chapter. The whole harry and Tonks thing would work better if you'd let us see the relationship develop instead of starting the story with them already loving each other. It's a bit like JKR did to us with Harry and Ginny.
brigrove 11/21/09 . chapter 5
A little cliché, but when there are several hundred thousand HP fanfics on this site alone, it's difficult not to be!

One error "They traced the line from Lilly Evans back ten generations to the two Hogwarts founders." The founders were 10 years ago, a generation is normally between 20 and 30 years, that is the age a person is when they have a child. Ten times 20 or 30 is not 10 years. It would be around 40 or 50 generations or ten centuries.
brigrove 11/21/09 . chapter 4
"When she got back to Privet drive, she collapsed into bed. She never noticed that she didn't collapsed into her bed."

Sorry? What was that last sentence?
brigrove 11/21/09 . chapter 2
nice chapter, but you should have come up with a reason why Harry didn't get a warning for magic being used in the Dursley house.
Tentrees 11/18/09 . chapter 6
Not bad. A bit fluffy and rushed but thats magic to. Keep it up and keep going.
The PhantomHokage 11/18/09 . chapter 4
Another nice chapter I can't wait to find out what happens at the meeting
Space Odin 11/17/09 . chapter 6
MORE! graet so far!
The PhantomHokage 11/16/09 . chapter 3
Great chapter I really I loved the morning part and Tonks way of talking some sense into Harry it was funny the way she tortured him lol
Daniel Haire 11/15/09 . chapter 6
To Whitetigerwolf,

I am writing this review/comment on your story "Friend, Mentor, Soulmate". My main comment is that so far in 6 chapters I have enjoyed it immensely and see the beginnings of a great story. Personally, Harry/Tonks is one of my favorite non-canon pairings along with the ever present Harry/Hermione pairing. It is however one of the most under used. I think that Rowling made a HUGE mistake putting Harry with Ginny. Ginny though a good character had too many of her mother's personality characteristics as well as being often overly abrasive and confrontational (probable side effect of being the youngest of seven). Tonks on the other hand has many of the same good points (courage, compassion, ability to look beyond propaganda, honesty) without the drawbacks. I always thought this was probably a necessity of being a Metamorphmagus as being compassionate and honest about herself was needed to be a strong independent personality. I think she meshes with harry quite well and once with him as either friend or lover (or in the case of your story wife) she'll put a Hufflepuff to shame with her loyalty. That loyalty is perhaps the one thing Harry needs the most and I would love to see how your story develops in that regard.

Anyways, the Soul Rings are definitely a Sirius Black style method of getting past Harry ad Tonks fears of emotionaly opening up. Definitely a fitting final "prank" from the canine Marauder. Also, I like how you were able to tie Lily's heritage into the wizarding world. Note: I would love to see the Dursley's find out and then die of apoplectic shock of being possibly abnormal themselves.

Also, can't wait to see what pops up during the "Public" reading of the will.

Please more Harry/Tonks soon and keep up the good work.

sincerely,

Daniel J Haire
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