Great story, although it's hard to call the stories of the arc separate with the very good flow between them.

It sure is a cliffy, so many unanswered questions, so much that can still happen. I hope to read more on this.

keep up the good writing,
reader101w

ok, that was cruel. That cliffie is pure lethality. :)
If I didn't know so many shrinks (they usually have worse problems than their patients) I might recommend you see one. Anyone who can dream up the idea of Mr. Hatchett as duenna (shudder) definitely has something that needs something.
Thanks again, and looking forward to your next,
Spectre

Aw... story's already finished? It was such a good read. Then again so are all your stories.

Well I understand the imposition of real life. I haven't been able to complete a story of my own in over a year with all of the imposing it does to me.

I like how you can take a cartoon show, with all its quirks and ridiculous qualities that make it a cartoon, and render them into a composite work that I can imagine happening to real(er) people. You have a real gift for turning a work of fiction into a coherent and believable story and I admire that.



However there is one critique I feel I should make. The majority of the characters, while pleasingly multidimensional, seem prone to extensive 'vocal' analysis and evaluation. In and of itself it's a terrific ability they have, and it lends itself to the sophistication of the stories, but at times I feel like you overdue the 'vocal' examination and reasoning. (Ex: Ron explaining how Senor Senior Sr. found the legal loophole to the Possibles while in front of the house itself).
I think the story would work just as well, deliver the same message, and maintain smooth dialogue between the characters if you could find ways to put a couple of the explanations into your narrative portions instead of the dialogues. That way you keep all the characters thinking and acting intelligently without making the real-world dialogue quite so formal.


Nonetheless, it was great story, and I hope you find the time, inspiration, and assistance of Joe Stoppinghem, needed to continue composing these great reads.

Terrific job!

Ok...what have you done with Daccu? I mean this is the same guy that writes 63 chapter epics, and then comes back with six chapters only? Are you sure you're feeling okay? I guess I'll have to do with this very good but very short story(does Kim's PDP) Looking forward to the fifth installment then!

Oh yes, I will say once again...

Camille Leon= rotflmao!

Later Daccu!

Now that was a classic O'Henry moment with Dementor and Carmelle. I imagine that Kim and Ron had to be as surprised as the kidnappers were at what transpired.

Now Mr.Dr.P. that was just mean! You would deprive Kim and Ron of some quality snuggle time like that! Inspired solution by Senior Senior Senior and a even more devious solution by Kim dad to prevent any hanky panky! Miss Hatchet; that was just evil, funny, but evil!

looks like Dementor realized gaining a new lower source wasn't worth being around a whiny, shapeshifting celebutant for another second. Shades of O. Henry, indeed.

So glad the lovers got a home from Senior, but Kim's dad hiring HER as a chaperone?! Sheesh, as if they weren't frustrated enough! James better not be around too much during Thanksgiving and Christmas; Kim may be tempted to give him more than dirty looks.

And now there's wolf in the fold at Middleton. Something still tells me she may not escape suspicion completely.

Thanks for the great read. I'm looking forward to the next story. (When you get the chance, and hopefully it'll be a real epic.)

See you soon!

Hatchett, HATCHETT? Oh NO... Well wait till you see how I use her in 'The Runion: Kimmie's Choice'. I can guarantee that will be even more sick and wrong Daccu.

So Amy/Miss Go is now the biology treacher at MH...So that's why you did include that...Well you was doing something else with her at the time anyway...

Poor Prof Dementor...he's learned his lesson...You know I could hear 'Valley Girl' everytime Camille opened her mouth.

Good job and well done.


Larry (Sentinel 103)

You know, that has to be probably the most believable way the Camille kidnapping could have ended. I doubt I would have lasted half as long as Dementor did. After putting up with her for a few days, prison will be almost like a vacation!

A nice way of handling the housing and team situations for Kim and Ron, although the chaperone almost seems like cruel and unusual punishment. It's going to be a long first semester.

Enter Miss Go. Why is she in Middleton now that Kim is gone? Hopefully you'll be addressing this in the next story.

Nicely done, Daccu!

Nice story, Dac. I got to say, what James did to Kim and Ron was pretty cruel. Having your story end on a cliffy note was pretty interesting, however I must protest the fact that this story and your previous tale were too short. Nothing personal, but I do hope you make your fifth story as long as you had made your second.

Poor Kim and Ron, that horrid librarian is going to be their chaperone! Well, on the plus side, it means that outside of the house they'll be away from...prying eyes. :)

Dementor freaking like that was bloody brilliant. XD

Way to go!

~
Mike.

Fantastic finale to this tale. The ending to the Camille/Dementor sitch was as hilarious as I was picturing it in my head, Haha. Great job there for sure.

The part with Kim and Ron moving in together *did* seem too good to be true. Mrs. Hatchet?! Oh, that's so wrongsick. Bad James. Very bad, James.

The ending was such a cliffie. Seems like we're going to have a problem in Middleton.

Great work, looking forward to more. Keep up the great work and good luck with the real life stuff. Real life is tough sometimes.

Man Dementor's sitch was rapidly becoming a latter day version of 'The Ransom of Red Chief', wasn't it? Still I wonder if he'll ever try to find an alternative source of a PDVI again...

Sneaky, is Kim's Dad about the chaperone for her and Ron's donated home. Nice of Senior to wrangle this for the duo, but did he have to take that phone call from James Possible when the elder villain was setting this up?

Right up until she unveiled herself to Kim and Ron, I was drawing a blank as to who it could be. Then just before that part came up I went "Oh no, not her!". But, yep, there she was...!

It's going to be one dreary year for those two lovers in that house.

But things are moving along at Middleton, with the arrival of that new teacher. Like a snake hiding in the grass, just waiting to strike, she waits for her moment. I do think her alias may just draw some attention to her, as well as her skin coloring... that she may not have really thought through.

Until the next one!

CajunBear73

I think Dementor learned why abducting spoiled heiresses is a bad idea. He may be getting the data he wants, but it's like pulling teeth to get it.

Warmonga is either very brave or extemely foohardy. Kidnapping Shego's child is an even worse idea than going after Hana. That's one sitch that can only end in pain for the green giantess.

You've got a real page turner going here, Daccu!

Great chapter here, daccu. And the plot thickens as to why Dementor is testing Mrs. Senior. (I still laugh that that, by the way)

It looks like S may be able to help out Kim and Ron when it comes to their living arrangement sitch and the club activity. That's definitely good. You figure they help out everyone in the world, yet can't get a favor, so the favor comes from a 'villain'. That's fantastic. I can't wait for the next chapter.

So Demez and Camille have finally met. Boy is he gonna have a headache! Don't listen to the body guard Demez...it'll make the headache feel better when she's screaming...Oh sorry Daccu...I got a little carried away there.

Hey Ron, I'll bet you can make haggis so that even KP wouild eat it...You know what the secret is? A teaspoon of one of the Glens and she'll love it. Everyone that I've tried that on never knew what they were eating till after they were done and I told them.

OK now with Senior, I'll gonna say that he's going to find a small home or condo, donate it to the Upperton U with the purpose that it can only be used to house world saving heroes (am I close).

OK guys go get Camille, but if you really want to do Senior a favor send Camille with Trudy and her pop to another demension...Just trading favors.

Thanks for the update,


Larry (Sentinel 103)