commendable writing!

lovely. very nicely written. and also, good detailing. and, nice plot :)

lovely!

Hana

Lovely. Very well written. If you ever write more Vampire Knight I would love to read it. I read the latest chapter of VK today, it saddened me, and then I saw this in my inbox. It made me feel better about Zero. I can see him really being like this. Well done. Looking forward to the next writing.

*is depressed now*
But that was really well-written! They were totally in character.
I love Zerorin, and I am seriously ** at Yuuki for ditching him.
Don't worry, Zero! I'll keep you company until she catches a clue! Hehehehe...

Beautiful. Just beautiful. It's the hardest thing ever to get into Zero's head and portray his emotions as in-character as possible, but this just managed to capture it all so flawlessly, I'm speechless O_O (*bows a million times)

I love how he's still feeling the pain, but is still able to mask it beneath the whole 'pureblood's-suck' thing, though I'm hoping beyond hope that you're gonna continue this?? =D This fandom is STARVED of some decent Zero-angst...hopefully the next chapter will be something like...uh, the party or something? =3

Another note of love...Zero's natural lure as a vampire? SEXINESS 8D It was like...wildly-gushing-mental-nosebleed mode activate!! It's so great that Zero's hotness is slightly more pronounced here...it tends to get a little uh, overshadowed beneath Kaname's extreme pureblood sexyfineness XD I also like the whole metaphor of the apple, and how ironic the poem sounds...(*is a fan of Arab poetry too =D) though Kaname and Yuuki meeting the rest of the Night Class there was strangely relaxing XD

Zero narrating those lines to himself as if trying to convince himself that Yuuki's happy with Kaname...(*sigh) Poor guy...i SO wanna give him a hug right now =(

Great job!! I absolutely loved it ^_^