|Reviews for Loser|
| Alice Shade 10/15/09 . chapter 2
Not bloody likely.
Secret societies of undead secretly ruling the Earth wouldnt suddenly come clean about it unless they have a deathwish.
Think about it. The whiplash from that kind of revelation will start a new wave of witch-hunting, with your "ruling elite" being prime choice for incineration. Paranoid greedy jealous ignorant pious xenophobic power-hungry finger-pointing humanity would never be able to accept walking corpses as their rulers. That kind of news has a very good chance to kickstart World War I, and quite possibly - End Of The World (TM).
| Mr. Wizard 10/15/09 . chapter 2
That's an interesting scenario you have for the future. Is it the truth, or are they all being lied to? Ron's reaction is still utterly on target.
| CajunBear73 10/15/09 . chapter 2
This is setting Ron up to fall at the hands of his 'best friend' and 'former enemy' in the name of a better 'humanity'? He won't accept Kim's change for the better and this will cause all kinds of problems with the two of them, as this is laid out.
Thought Kim learned to not follow the glitz and glamor of the food chain by now, or is this before StD?
I think there's more to Kim's acceptance than either she or Shego is letting on here. And it ain't just so she can fight crime forever, either...
| RDF-73 10/15/09 . chapter 2
Interesting chapter love to see more and how or what might happen to the Ron man, I have a thought but I want to see where your going to take it.
| screaming phoenix 10/15/09 . chapter 2
I think that your premise is somewhat flawed here. You have Kim accepting the vampire role to be part of the ruling elite? That's about as out of character as you can get for Kim. You know Kim Possible? The girl who shuns the food chain in high school but agrees to become part of a ruling class now?
And why would they want Shego at all? She's a sidekick who has never wanted to do anything important by herself. So now she's so important that they recruit her? If you wanted to legitimatize your actions, past and present, you don't use a international criminal to do it with.
You Ron is the whinny, halfhearted friend, and typical looser that is usually found in kigo stores to explain why Shego is a more fitting mate for Kim than he is.
I'm wondering how you will work around these large holes in your plot and still produce a readable tale. I'm waiting.
| morring star 10/15/09 . chapter 2
nice keep it coming. mabe a bit more in a chapter would be nices.
| morring star 10/11/09 . chapter 1
| RDF-73 10/11/09 . chapter 1
Nice start to this story not sure if you going to keep as a one shot but I really think more could be added. Update soon.
| screaming phoenix 10/11/09 . chapter 1
I really would like to know where this is going!
| Comet Moon 10/11/09 . chapter 1
Very nice start.
Wonder who turned Shego.
And what the deal was
Look forward to more
| ShadowCub 10/11/09 . chapter 1
Get over yourself Ron and get a grip.
| CajunBear73 10/11/09 . chapter 1
Curious to see what was Kim's motivation here. Did she want to 'hang' with Shego in this way, for other reasons too...?
And what of Ron with Kim, and now Shego(?)?
| Mr. Wizard 10/11/09 . chapter 1
Very curious to see where you plan to go with atmosphere.