 mjm 6/8/11 . chapter 1 OMGLOL!
That is all. ) |
 lokoforsonic9559 2/24/10 . chapter 1This is really funny! I love it! |
 Lilith Luciferia 2/11/10 . chapter 1Amusing. (Poor Spock, getting a candy apple thrown at him.) Good story. |
 Fernsfairie 1/3/10 . chapter 1I didn't know Butter Sculpture existed! But, you can totally have bourbon on a stick... If it's a Popsicle! ;]
Fern Rose |
 Lover of Angelus 10/14/09 . chapter 1...butter sculptures... butter... butter scuptures...
Hm.
I FREAKING LOVE IT!
Kudos to you for your great writing style and imagination.
-Lover of Angelus |
 the-amazing-lyndz 10/11/09 . chapter 1highly amusing...you did a wonderful job at creating a humourous story...though i have to admit i never knew people made butter sculptures...all my life i've only ever used butter with food...not art supplies...
one critism though...while they are in the future i doubt that the world as changed it's rotation so yay while there are 24h in a day they won't call midnight 2400h...since that time doesn't exist with the 24h clock system...it would be zero hundred hour or o'hundred hour...though there has been a 2400h before in history...it's called a leap second...(I'm sorry i got so technical there but as i'm sure you know everyone has their pet peeves and one of mine is unfortunately the proper use of the 24h clock)...
all in all you did a wonderful job, and i look forward to reading more of your work in the future...keep up the amazing job...
Lyndz |
 OceanTiger13 10/11/09 . chapter 1 Oh my god, I loved the ending! So cute! (I hope that didn't sound patronizing; I mean it was sweet of Jim to do that). I really, really liked it. Lol, bourbon on a stick. |
 Dana Katherine 10/11/09 . chapter 1Pure crack. I love it! Scotty finding a sandwich on a stick? Brilliant. The bridge crew in butter? Yum. Does that give us permission to eat the delicious...um, never mind. Great job :D |
 Toadflame 10/11/09 . chapter 1Ah haha! Very nice! |
 Shizuka Sen 10/11/09 . chapter 1HILARITY! I've been to the Iowa State Fair every year since I was...oh, two or three. I was hoping the Butter Cow would make an appearance! Oh, that was awesome...
I think you should do a sequel in which everyone goes on the Ye Olde Mill ride and the Skyride at the fair. And Spock can enter the talent show with his Vulcan harp! XD |
 Mutt Winchester 10/11/09 . chapter 1It is indeed a story to tell the grandkids! Cute story!
Salima Master of Light |
 Aashlee Elizabeth 10/11/09 . chapter 1Crack on a stick! Yes, indeed. As a veteran of the Minnesota State Fair and its own butter insanity, you "reach" here, LOL!
More culture shock in future chapters should be funny. Be sure to explain State Fair culture and references as you go along, especially for the international audience. (You may need footnotes...I certainly had to explain a few things to my relatives from out East!)
Do they have 4-H competitions in the future, too? |
 lyra vega 10/11/09 . chapter 1 You know, I'm from Minnesota and I actually really understand this! Fun read! |
 anonymous 10/11/09 . chapter 1 I loved it! I have gone to the Ohio State Fair every year and I always get to see the butter cow! I laughed so hard when I read that part! The Enterprise Crew at the fair? That is just way too good! Awesome job! (My favorite line was Kirk's when he said that they had almost any kind of food on a stick!) |