Good start =)
The grammar is a little off but that's about it.

interesting but sort of confusing :)

Strange first chapter but I like it.

I am utterly confused but I am hoping this clears up in the next chapter.

def dif

Not sure the characters are my style

Ja ne

JIm

hm im really interested in knowing where you're going to take this. Update soon :)

I love your story. each of them. And this is a great begining. I received a message saying the second chapter was uploaded but i could not access it


Update soon

kind of confused by the chapter, update soon...

thanks for doing this you rock!




^_^

*sigh* i guess I can forgive you for writting a new story, even though you have so many other ones since you're writting this for someone. But please have mercy on my poor heart, you have left me hanging in the cresentia story, and that is not healthy, the Book 2 story can wait, but not for long. Be a dear, and ease my suffering, your stories give me something to do when i'm putting off homework *pout* pwease

Not bad little story. See what happens... Bit shocked in the thank you, really no need. :D