Great job! I really like this tory, and I love the steam of consciousness. :D

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This story is AMAZING... to say the least!
Not trying to be a buzzkill but watch your grammar!
But The Story Is Absolutely BRILLIANT! :)
Can't think of much more to say :/ meh!

Thank you for updating! Aw, poor Takanuva and his sparkles. He can get off topic...

Oh, but then he gets on topic and is very serious, and I like that too.

Thanks for updating. It seems like forever since you last updated. I like how Takanuva was explaining his man-hood. That was funny. Haha. Please update soon! We don't want to be left in mid-air... again. Bye!

TD

Love it. And I'm sure no one would mind if you went a little OC with Lewa. I sure wouldn't. :)

For me it's Pohatu that's hard to write. ^^

Are you going to continue this? Because, I like it. It's ,like, really awesome. But I can't believe you made Onua do that! I mean, it just seems out of character for him. You get what I'm saying? Anyway, please write more! I wanna see what happens! 'Kay, Bye!! :)

Sort of edit thing to my other review.

The first three paragraphs in thi chapter are close to the most striking part in this story. So shocking to have it start up like that. And, to quote, "You think you can...can just tell me you loved me all along and everything will be alright" is just... wow.

Love this story. It's the kind of thing that makes me go "Oh my god..." And be both thinking at a way higher level than normal at the same time as being completely blank and staring at the wall for awhile. I really look forward to the next chapter you write. And sound's great that you think there'll be an update soon. Just don't let yourself get too depressed...

I like it! <3

I like it :) it took me a moment to get it because I didn't know it was a dream sequence at first, but once I did, it was primo :D

I'm so glad there's going to be more than just five or six, and I can't wait for the next one...although I'm not so happy you aren't in a great mood.

"I can’t believe that I just quoted Gali."

I laughed at that one, I'm glad I found this story, even if it is almost done...still :)

Ah! I love your writing style :D And this is more than perfect, the emotion involved is a great focal point, keep writing!