The fact of how boring it got into ch.2.Work on it some more,youll get beter.

...Yeah... This ish a good fic, the swearing rocks... Don't let the children put ya down... Ya... Peace... OnE!

i hate you you idiot!ja!

Good fic, would have liked a little more development between Bulma and Vegeta though. It was certainlly heading in that direction but took a quick turn to the end. I hope to see more good stuff from you in the future.

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The language! Tsk.Tsk. Naughty peoples! Oh well, very good, looks like the start of a good fic, might need a little work. Might wanna chill out on the swearing, even though a lot of people like it you did kinda almost have aone swer word in like, every scentence that Bulma and Vegeta said. But other than the emense swearing you did okay, keep it up!

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Oh that was good. Please do so continue!

~Lady Tskuya

My englisch is not very good because i'm dutsch, and i've only 1 year englisch now.But i think that you can onderstand me when í say that i harldy can't wait to the next chapter. You wrote this one very good.Good luck with your next chapter.Rinske

WOW!! I LOVE this fic!!! It's the most amazing thing I've ever read!!!!! You have GOT to continue REALLY soon!!!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE continue as soon as possible!!!!!!