It's an amazing story, can't wai to see how it progresses :D

Oh, this looks like it'll be a promising story.

The beginning was great. The detail was great and you kept everyone in character as far as I could tell. I'm curious to see what happens to her grandfather, and what he's going to tell her.

Can't wit to see more!

AE

Whoa, this is really exciting! I Can't wait to read the rest!

Ooh, cliffhanger! You are so evil! *throws random objects* UPDATE! I'm warning you! *waves Spat (Spongebob's spatula) above hand* I have a spatula!

loved it please continue