I like this so far. There aren't nearly enough Zack survival fics out there- especially ones that use Crisis Core cannon.

Brilliant! You guys have to update!!

plz update soon! this is a great story

great first chapter please update soon

I'm so glad you guys are back!

Being a lover of Zack Fair I absolutely adore the story idea and I hope that you expand on it. ^-^

beutiful writing. I love the plot and the style. I really hope that I get to read more of your writing soon.

I kinda spazzed when my email told me that you had written something!

An excellent start - I really can't wait to read more.

This story's really very well written; it's very professional, in fact, except for one consistent grammatical error.

Pick up any novel you have lying around and look at the way speech is written.

Correct: "Yes," he said.

Incorrect: "Yes." He said.

There -are- times it is appropriate to follow up a spoken statement with a sentence starting with a capital letter, but that's when the new sentence is something entirely unto itself.

More correct examples:

"Never do that again, Reno," he threatened.
"What?" she asked excitedly.
"Never!" he exclaimed, leaping out of his chair.

Correct examples of a subsequent capital letter:

"I thought so." He stood, brushing imaginary dust off his suit lapel.

"It really hurt!" The Turk scowled at his captive, death glowing in his eyes.

... Overall, to get a feel for how this is handled, read any professionally published novel and just observe how it's done there.

Ohh, very excited about this :) I always thought it was kinda crazy, he beats off the whole army except for three guys? Seriously!! Plus SAD AS HELL. (Yes, I am one of the fangirls who cried when Zack died) Can't wait to read more!

I love fanfices where zack is alive in some way

Wow, what an amazing first chapter! The way you've characterized Zack seems absolutely perfect, from his dialogue, to the way he treats Cloud, its all perfect! Can't wait to read more of this story! Hopefully it will be neither angst filled nor extremely fluffy as the best kinds of stories are the ones with balance =D So far you have me hooked! Can't wait for more, keep up the great work!

Well this is exciting! Is this going to be a heterosexual story between Zack and Cloud? There are very few canon heterosexual Clack stories, so that'd be awesome if it was. Your diction and prose were beautiful, and this was very situation driven, not character driven. Given the fact that there are two people right now, and only one can talk, there's not much more you can do with that. There were a few things that bothered me though. Probably the biggest thing is that I thought he was in love with Aerith. Even if you don't believe that, I think they were more than just friends. This story treated their relationship like they were friends, which was slightly disappointing. Weren't they trying to make it to Midgar because Aerith was there? What other reason did they have to go there? Every time that Zack mentioned Aerith it was followed with a, "Wait for me Aerith." In fact they had no other reason to go to Midgar, right? Their chances of being caught were probably very high in Midgar. Second thing that bothered me is that Cloud was referred to as a teen. He was 21 at the end of Crisis Core, no? Zack was 23, and Cloud was 21. Anyway, I'm just as big of a Zerith as I am a Clack (friendship), so I was a tad disappointed with the lack of thought Zack had about Aerith. . . Another thing I thought was interesting is that you had Zack telling Cloud a whole bunch of details about his life. They were on the run for a year though, don't you think he would have told him those details sometime during that period? I don't know. . . maybe not. Anyway, I'll be following this though because your diction is excellent, and I love Clack stories ^_^ Thanks!

This fic is already off to an epic start! One can really imagine what's going on with the , what seems like, painstaking detail you put in your descriptions of the events taking place. Awesome grammar and spelling is also a plus you don't see in too many 'Zack survives' fics here and I'm glad that this hasn't gone down that route. Looking forward to your completion of this one. =^-^=

PLEASE CONTINUE!

One chapter in and I’m liking it a lot :D
There are a lot of stories out there with Zack surviving the end of Crisis Core but I have to say this is looking like one of the better ones. You are brilliant at writing, it’s very descriptive – not hard to imagine at all.
Can’t wait to read more.

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Wow, seeing something from you two pop up in my inbox just sent me into a whirl of excitement. Even though it wasn't an update to a story that I've wanted updated for a while, it still really made me happy.

There's just something about the way you two write... it feels like life's been breathed into the words... that it's playing out like a movie before my eyes, but they're only words on a page. So, even though I'm not a total fan of FFVII, and the only reason why I read this was because I just recently got Crisis Core and it's you guys who posted, I really enjoyed reading something new from you guys.

I hope you guys are doing better and will update at some point. ^_^ Love your work!

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