Yay, new chappie! Aw, poor Bella. Emmett's an idiot sometimes!

A couple of grammar/punctuation mistakes (told you I was a nitpicker!), but other than that, great chappie! Can't wait for the next one!

Ano

Itsok but ur puncuation needs some work

This is really good!

You're doing very well, keep up the good work!

Cherry said

Oh! Fuck...

Now she must continue.

Tamsin said

I love her story...

Now she must continue.

U will continue won't ye?

(the)End

(It means continue from up to down)

PLEASE!Please, ...The story...

i was smiling and laughing all thru this chapter it was soo sweet and like i sed hu ud go out with mike wen theve got edward

it would be best if you extended the chapters. or have frquent updates

oh brother! Edward's gonna be pissed off.

Yeah,Emmetts always emmett

FANTASTIC JOB you did really great with this chapter! maybe next time a little longer though:) just trying to help ppl out ! awesome it seems like a thing edward would do great move!

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Destini

Hi!

Don't worry-I personally think the change in authorship has gone really well! A good introduction to your writing style, and you kept the feel and atmosphere of the original seven chapters-a feat that only a select handful of authors can acheive, so well done! The only possible thing that I could comment on (and this is coming from a MAJOR nit-picker) is that you might want to replace some of your commas with full stops-it gets kinda hard to read. Other than that, great! I don't think the original author could have chosen a better person to carry on this fic!

Ano

hi thanks thats is a great story- and yeah i like your writing style-and im looking forward to the next chapter... )

This is really good! You've done really well!

I can't wait for the next update!

You may be the new author, but it was still really nice, glad the story can continue.

it was alright