Shot, bitchfight _

Er, I don't intend to be rude, but this story, quite frankly, is horribly written. I suppose the plotline and pervert humor would work if you had applied them to the correct characters... In this story, your characters seem like just names, and not the people with complex personalities as Square made them. I hope you gain a better perspective in writing with pre-fabricated characters in the future as you could be a good writer.

Sorry Alan my friend, you're a hack. I've read a lot of your stories and well, they suck. And the sad is there are so many. So I bid you adieu and kick myself for not noticing the author before I read this.

'private tutoring'?

Hehehehehehehe, I like the bitch relationships between them all! I hope you continue!

xxx

Mort