glad you aren't going to blindly fallow canon.

It's always annoying when a new character is introduced and his presence has absolutely no effect on what happens. They put the character and have a rehash of the storyline where the character does a very little something... but in the end, it's as if nothing comes from the new presence.

With Harry being there, so many things should turn differently.

nice addition, i would say that harry should use magic sparingly, and only when he wont get caught, but use it to help survive, also if it comes down to it, survival is more important than anything else, so use the magic. he can always say he has a few ancient abilities.

Rush drives me mental. Not just yours, but the actual Rush from the show. He's really annoying. But I like this idea and am looking forward to an update!

Nice chapter. Well written, and I like where you're going with this fic. Looking forward to reading more~

This is interesting.:) Please go on!

Interesting I will follow it if you write.

I am very curious to see what you'll do with this. Keep writing!

He will need to end up doing magic, at some point, to save someone's life or something, be interesting to know how he got attached to the Icarus project, maybe as like a ministry for magic super secret liaison or something (remember, according to stargate, Merlin and that crowd were all ancients)

Good Story

I like this! I look forward to reading more.

I am also glad that he will befriend Rush, as I am rather fond of him as a character. :)

I not quite certain you are handeling Harry properly per say never mind you have basically skipped much of the meat and potatos of the show for just a few segements of Harry time. Really now if you would be so kind as to add a bit more FILLING to this story we might actually get a mouthful but as it stands you just need to write more.

update update update!

""How he will affect the plot line I am not sure. I am not sure I even want him doing much magic. We will see. I do want him to be friends with Rush though.""

Umm, what the hell is the point then? The whole point of Harry Potter is the concept of ordinary people having extraordinary power, not ordinary people with... ordinary stuff. Plus there's the inherent OOC-ness of a Harry Potter who doesn't use magic to help the rest of them. If it's within his power to make their lives (including his own) that much easier, why wouldn't he? And where would Harry have any experience with a gun? They're practically nonexistant in the Magical world, and, as a civilian, they're illegal for Harry to own in non-magical Britain.

I could almost accept this as an idle character study, except that Harry's character is defined by his power - how he uses it to help or to hurt. So basically, what you've created is a random OC whose sole reason for existing is to satisfy some strange urge to make Rush act like less of a bastard.

You want some constructive advice? Scrap this and start over. You already have a pretty good grasp of the English language, which is more than most authors on this site can claim, so all you really need to work on is plot. You want Rush/Harry friendship? Fine, just keep it in character for both of them, which means Harry uses magic to do what he can from the beginning. Maybe he does it in secret, or maybe he just comes right out and tells everyone he's a wizard; Though I personally prefer the former, as it adds the conflict of Harry having to sneak around while everyone else wonders what he's up to, it's ultimately up to you.

You have a good premise and above-average writing skills, you just need to find a direction for the story, 'cause if you continue on the course you've set, it'll turn into a soap opera snore-fest real quick. I'm sorry if you feel like I'm picking on you, but I have to be honest here. And if it helps, I really am trying to help you improve your writing style. I just feel that blunt honesty is the best way of doing that. Whatever you decide to do, I wish you luck.

brilliant

Very interesting...can't wait to see where you are gonna take this.

BlackRose

Great start! Please post more. I know you are going at the speed of the show but this is a great start.