Wow, this is confusing but very interesting! I'd love to read this story! Can't wait! This the first plot like that. Yay, you! Cheers for creativity, lolz.
Update soon!
xD XD xD!

LOL...Nick, Nick, Nick,NIck, NIck...LOL...AWESOMENESS...LOL...:)

Damn

-Maddy

Wow. I think this story really has a great start. I think you could slow down a little bit, give us some more time to soak it up. Either way though, I definitely think this story is worth watching grow. Descriptions are excellent. Update soon, can't wait to see what comes next!

CM2~

Only one comment on the actual grammar in this chapter... When you say the oldest of four children, you need to say the oldest of 5 children. With Gazzy, Angel, Ari, and Ella, you (Max) is number 5. Also, great stuff, I like it!

gr8 start
i luv it
will iggy n nudge be in the story??
hope so =]
keep writin
x

Nice! Update soon!

this is greating really good! i cant wait to see what happens!

Whoa. Information overload.
The key to being a writer is show all, not tell straight out.
You could've started this properly from the first day Nick came, and worked through, rather than saying one or two things about it in retrospect. It would've been very interesting, and easier to remember.

Interesting, so I'll add this to my alert and see where it goes.

~TM

Very interesting... I definitely want to see where this is going.

One little thing I saw in part one, she's the oldest of five, not four. There are five children and she's the eldest, not four children.

Hey!
Ok, so this was confusing but cute.
Can't wait for the next update!
Yours,
Rayven

Ok, I'm confused... I guess the only way to understand is for you to update. *shrugs* (Update soon! This is totally original and cool. Please and thank you.:D)

LOL...I'm only slightly confused...but I'm gradually understanding...LOL...Okay, now I get it...LOL...Sounds AWESOME...Update Soon, PLEASE!

ok. i gotta ask 2 questions:
1.) Since when is Gazzy the younger, and Angel the older? not that i mind or anything. just never seen anyone do that before. and...
2.) Is Max completely crazy?

OH! I FREAKING LOVE THIS!! I know i say this for alot of stories, but even though this only has one chapter, its SO well thought out! Goodness, i didnt want it to end!