Nice so far. Liking the weird dynamics between this Desier guy and Fina. XD Kinda strange how he got sick over seeing Fina, though. But he's not my character, so I guess I'll figure it out later on.

The style is flowy and the language is descriptive enough. It's not too descriptive, either. Too much is bad. XD

One qualm, however: Fi's eyes are green. :3

Interested to see where this will go. Keep this train rolling! .3.