This is so sweet and so sad. Wash was my favourite, still is, and when Joss killed him I cried like a child in time out.

I like how it delves into how River perceives everybody's mind, and how well it is written.

A truly great work of (fan)fiction
Kirux

Gah! I go looking for a happy Firefly story and think 'Oh, yay, Wash and River playing with dinosaurs!" and then this! This! Don't get me wrong, it was wonderful. Utterly brilliant. But, oh, the heart ache! Too sad :( It was beautifully written. I loved it. I'm just going to cry in a corner now, kay?

You've just made me cry. Congratulations.

(Seriously, though, this is brilliant.)

Oh my God! That was full stop amazing! I just loved how River's conciousness was so fluid but still managaed to have the disjointedness so integral to her insanity.
The sensations you prescribe for each character were just heart-wrenchingly spot on. Like Mal at war with eveyrthing, or Jyane being rudely mechanical. Guh.
My favorite bit though, hands down the Wash you made with such care here. In, what, 10 odd sentences on him alone, you've really brought one of the least acknowledged characters to vivid life.
So kudos on that and I can't wait to read more of your stuff!

This is fantastic! Everything from how each of their minds are to River's views... perfection! I like how Wash thinks of her, it fits, and kinda how I always thought of her; beautiful and wonderful, but broken.

wow, never of thought of that before - that river knew wash would die. good story!

TRAGIC and beautiful, totally unexpected ending but so amazingly perfect!

That was a very well written story. I liked the synesthetic energy of it, everyone's mind has a sound, a taste, and the things she sees/feels/tastes are well thought out on your part, they make lots of sense. I liked the little details, like how Wash likes Zoe's right breast the best, how River never uses the stegasaurus because it is Wash's favorite and she can relate to having favorite things that she doesn't want others to mess with. You've created a beautiful connection between River and Wash and it makes sense that they'd get on well, both in the sense of playing together and in the sense of River's growing attachment to being in the black, the stars and the cockpit. I think its good for her to help him copilot while lucid enough to do it, Simon should like that too, though you do a great job of highlighting his worried/worrysome side. But he is a pretty good caregiver and I have to give him credit, even if he is too restrictive sometimes. You write River very well and the foreshadowing element is interesting, also the element of her talking to him through the dinosaurs and he talking back to her. You seem to follow the "A completely coherant River means writers don't deliver" KatTaya, principle, very good and never abandon it even if you do write something post bdm, the revelation of a secret doesn't fix a brain that has been mussed with, River's wits would still be touched. Again great job, I really like the River Wash friendship that you've created here, I love the idea that he got the "leaf on the wind" thing from her, clever idea.
Riona

This is surprisingly heart-wrenching, with River unable to save Wash. But the part that is most enlightening, somehow, is the bit where you talk of Inara, and River curling up inside one of her trunks, and how Inara just accepts it. It is very evocative. Thank you.

I really like the ending and how you described everyone From River's perspective. Keep flying =)