Yay an update! I thought this fanfic might have died with a cliffhanger, but apparently it hasn’t! Don't worry, I haven't forgotten your ficcy, I'll catch up with my reviews (OF DOOM) sometime ;D

“Because I don't think I'd be a good father and have to be all strict because that's not me.”
ORLY?
GO TO YOUR TENT! D<

“Hong's eyes went wide.
"I don't understand." she said simply”
I was kinda surprised she reacted like this, because technically… isn’t this fairly old news already? Especially since she even had a proof from Biyu.

Punctuation is your friend, hmm, yes, very much so... Shorter sentences are better than longer ones, unless of course they're too short. M, I don't think griffins existed in Chinese mythology. Kaiten and Rika are very much Japanese names, not Chinese, yes?

Oh, so it wasn’t guardian promotion, but some sort of good-bye gift that Mushu is big now – alright. But wait – if Mushu isn’t a guardian anymore because he left the temple for Kaiten, couldn’t he technically raise Hong?
He told Mulan earlier that he just couldn’t do that because else he wouldn’t be a guardian anymore in that case – but *that* apparently already got into action.
My, what a bad father he is – stealing away from responsibility just because responsibility makes him sad *headshake*
He’ll prolly get it all paid back when the witch comes into action.

And about the ancestors, I have to agree with my previous reviewer there.
I doubt that the ancestors would take him back again if he came crawling back – with a child ontop. They’re just not responsible enough for this, and besides they’d STILL be busy partying ~
Time is no limit for them.

Also, I was assuming the mother to be a human, since – after all it was stated – that Hong had a human soul. One part of me is glad that is *no* human, for that non-existent human’s sake, the other part of me is confused. Where did that human part come from?

However, I noticed a strong quality increase in the readability of your fanfic already, the shorter sentences do work – good job =)
Keep going with that.

So, I really wonder what this sorceroress has been plotting in the meantime of our little flashbackandexplanationplz-chapter. Apparently Mushu and her seem to know each other already. Tension! I love tension.

Give me Chappy 4. Now! >8D
And thank you very much for the clearance, in the latest one ^^

Wouldn't the Ancestors be busy partying if Mushu decided to leave for any reason? They've been trying to kick him out for two movies straight. Something like this would be like winning the lottery ten times over.

Hello there! ^^
I’m really glad to see another Mulan fanfic around, and especially one that gives Mushu a little attention – he needs more attention.

That is an actually... interesting plot. You have a nice cliffhanger ending there as well, leaving the reader with a tension – especially since apparently that “witch” spotted out little Hong because Mulan and Shang as a human can’t defend her the way the real parents would.

However, there are a few things that I wanna point out. The most outstanding thing is, that you should try to separate your sentences a little more (good places for it are where you put the “buts” and such).

Also what I would wish for is some little explanation and all, it makes the story a little awkward and definitely confusing to read. Don’t say that things suddenly change and are that way just because you say it, when it didn’t used to be like that. e.g. Mushu suddenly being big. I suppose this is a fanon-thing you made up for him being promoted to a guardian again and that you kind of set him equal with the Great Stone Dragon, however, there are also other smaller guardians in the temple, it would be nice to know what exactly happened to turn Mushu into a classical eastern.
Also, I would like to know something about the mother. How did they meet, who was she, why did she go to heaven and not into the ancestors’ temple and why did she die in first place? Things like that. Especially about the last part I guess you can do a flashback in a later chapter or something.

I suggest that you should get yourself a beta reader of some sort, or someone to proofread your story for grammar errors and typos. This is not meant to offend you or something, I’m just trying to help you make your story better, and I’m sure that this is what we both want.

Until then, I’m looking forward to your next instalment ~