OOH~! THIS IS GETTING GOOD!!

UPDATE SOON~!!

Cool~! Update soon~!!

COOL~! UPDATE SOON~!!

P.S: Ike's so sweet! Always want to help others!

This is impressive work. No one feels out of character, no spelling mistakes, nothing that feels out of place...you're a credit to this community.

AWESOME~! BELIEVE IT~!

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Ah, ich mag die Richtung, die die Geschichte annimmt. Und so zu erfahren, wer der Black Knight ist, ist auch wesentlich besser als im Spiel. Da kommt Ranulf einfach und sagt mal ebenso; "Hey Ike, der Schwarze Ritter ist übrigens Zelgius und Tschüs." Irgendwie mag ich Bertram jetzt sehr gerne. :D
Allerdings ist mir aufgefallen, dass du Lucia zweimal als Lycia geschrieben hast. Flüchtigkeitsfehler, vermutlich.

AW~! POOR ELINCIA!!

Sad...poor Elincia. T^T

anyways update soon! ^^

OH...MY...GDO! THAT WAS AWESOME~!!

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I've been keeping up, but just haven't had time to review. Elincia's really going down a path I never expected, threatening Leanne like that. It's a bit sad to see her resorting to this. You know you portray her change so well that it doesn't seem out of character for her. Give yourself a pat on the back for that.

Keep up the good work.

AWESOME~! BELIEVE IT~!

Wahaha! Die Version von dem Kampf ist viel cooler als die im Spiel. Als ich zur Stelle gekommen bin, wo Elincia Leanne entführt, hab ich richtig Herzklopfen vor Spannung bekommen. Sowas kommt selten vor, also bin ich jetzt sehr glücklich. ^^ Auch wenn das spät abends vielleicht nicht so gut ist. Wie soll ich jetzt schlafen?

AWESOME ONCE AGAIN!

You know, I've always hated that Valtome! He give me the creeps! Ugh!

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A follow up- after having read on your profile that English is not your first language, I am about ten times more impressed with you. For this quality of writing and word choice to come from someone whose first language is not English is amazing. You're right, there are a couple barely noticeable errors, but I paid much more attention to your ability to convey exactly what you wanted with the perfect amount and choice of words. Many other writers working in a language other than their first tend to have that problem- knowing what they want to say but not entirely how to say it. I saw none of that from you. There is plenty of detail, but none of it is flowery or unnecessary. Your work is a pleasure to read.

This is an absolutely wonderful story. I feel it would be cruel of me to say I'm enjoying reading it, but I will say that I am enjoying your excellent writing and your very human portrayals of the characters, especially Elincia. Normally I can't stand her character, but your portrayal has me truly sympathizing with her as we watch her position change her and force her into corruption, even as she struggles against it. The emotion in this story is raw and overwhelmingly real, and I am very much looking forward to reading more.