Very sweet and short and perfect in every sense. I liked where you ended it.

I'm not usually one for inserting song lyrics into fics, but I must admit that you pulled it off rather well.

And now I'm going to read 'Fish Don't Sleep', again...

that's the best kind of coincidences

It was a very sweet shot. I'm glad that I could read it.

Keep writing! XD

Ok, let’s begin. My first impression is that I’m going to give this a chance. The summary is not distracting, and it might actually be good.
“The sword sang as it slid in to it’s sheath” Well… the whole sentence here was somewhat awkward. “in to” should be “into”
“it’s” should be “its” – the way you use it, it would be “in to it is sheath”. And that’s just a bunch of words garbled together.
“Was his simple command before he turned to leave, without giving her so much as to an explanation as to why” This whole sentence felt like a question at first, until I realized you were trying to do something along the lines of. “’Don’t let my foolish half brother leave you unprotected again,’ was his simple command.” Or just go with “he commanded.” It would leave the sentence feeling less awkward. And… “as to an explanation as to why” makes absolutely no sense at all. “As an explanation as to why” might work a bit better.
“Which Sesshoumaru pointed out to her when he picked her up off the ground, mindful to be careful of her twisted ankle, and sets her on the lip of the well.” You change tenses from present to past tense in the middle of a sentence. Bad. Bad you.
“She jokes, and tried to laugh the truth off as a joke” Again. You do this many other times. If you’re going to try a different tense, commit to it. I know from personal experience that sometimes it’s hard to get used to a different tense, but if you use it right, it pays off in the end. A lot of people are reluctant to use present tense just because it can turn out like this. With a little more practice and concentration, you’ll get the hang of it. If you didn’t consciously want to change tenses… then you should go back to the basics. Master past tense before present tense, while trying to keep it all in order. Mixing tenses is not only confusing but very offputting.
“The room was holding it’s breath, waiting for someone to answer.” Again with the “it’s” instead of the “its”. “It’s” means “it is”, as in, “it is purple”. “Its” is possessive, as in “its color”. Confusing sometimes, I know, but that’s the English language for you.
“There was a creak of a floor board on the hut’s patio, and a flash of silver hair by the window, and Kagome could practically taste Sesshoumaru stalking around the building.” This sentence is what makes me end up liking this fic a whole lot more than I expected. Very real image from this.
I’m not a huge fan of SessKag, but the feeling of this was very real. It was pretty well-developed and had a nice flowly style if you ignore the tense problems. There were some minor grammar problems, but I saw no spelling errors, so at least you know how to use your spell checker.
Overall, good job. You’ve got the basics down, and I think, if you keep practicing and learning from your mistakes, you could make a great writer. :)
Yours,
BRE <3

a bit romantic

i love i hope the there will be more

That was very good. I absolutely love your stories. You are an amazing author. (giggles) I can't wait to read any other stories you may come up with and the updates to the other stories I have read of yours. You ROCK!
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