Firstly, It doesn't make sense, It's stupid, Terrible title, You spent too much time making it rhyme,you ran out of ideas, You didn't separate it into verses and it is too short. At least you tried! :(

wow. i loved this! but man, i was so upset wen La Brosse was destroyed

It's a good poem, but it's a bit flowery. It doesn't show much of the detail within the conflict at the end, and it's slightly confusing as to whether it is an abstract poem or a direct one.

Allin in all, a pretty good poem, but it has room to improve.

Great poem!

Great poem! Your expressions were amazing, and i'm surprised that there are so many words that actually rhyme!(probably coz i'm horrible at rhyming)

It really made me remember Connor's determination all over again.

Good luck and hope u write more poems!:-)

MJ

First thing- I was amused by the 'review this story' button at the bottom of the page.

The rhyme scheme is perfect, but that just emphasizes the fact that machine doesn't rhyme with see.

Excellent poem though.

I like poetry, and I like Airman. So far, you are the only one who's put them together. Darn.

Can you write more?

Go Connor!

I'm not normally into poetry, but for this I'll make an exception *grins*

Fantastic! Very nice poem, I liked it a LOT! I love Airman, and really wish there was more fanfiction in this fandom :( But this was really great and I hope to see more work from you :)

very good