when are you going to put chapter 16 up because i want to know whats going to happen next and if gosalyn and drake are going to get back toghther and this story is geting to be good

when are you going to put chapter 11 up because i want to know whats going to happen next and if gosalyn and drake are going talk to each other again and this story is geting to be good and keep up the good work

There are some interesting concepts for this story with far reaching implications, such as Gosalyn actually being Negaduck's daughter, that could have quite a bit of emotional impact if they were written out as a part of the storyline. Unfortunately, your summarizing style of telling rather than showing undermines that dramatic feel for the story.

What you have of narrative skims over a lot of rather important, life-changing events in short blurbs (such as stating that everyone has found love, and making your first chapter a cast list, rather than introducing these characters in the prose) that would be more compelling if written out in the story, or at least summarized in more detail. How did Drake, Launchpad, and Gosalyn meet their love interests and get to know them? What were the circumstances? These are all things would be much more interesting if we know the whole story behind it. As it is, a reader enters your story lost or, if they commit your cast list to memory, with no real emotional connection or attachment to the characters, since so little is known about them or their relationships with the canon characters we already know. With original characters it's important to make the reader know and understand them so we can sympathize and come to like them as a natural part of the storyline.

Also, in case you were not aware, script format stories are not supposed to be posted on as per their guidelines. I did not read past the first chapter of story, so if you fixed that later on, then I apologize, but I wanted to warn you before someone reports the story as a terms of service violation.

I do apologize if this review came across as harsh, as I certainly am not trying to be mean or discouraging. Good luck with your writing.