oh my god




I wish I were capable of critting this, but. I am just too overwhelmed.


A plus plus.

Wow. This was excellent. There's something about your writing style that makes this impossible to quit reading. Very morbid; it seemed like Itachi was almost in a sort of dreamlike state here.
Brilliant work; this was really well done.

Your writing is so great!
This was... good reading.
I can't really think of anything else to say, than brilliant O_o

Wow... this was so dark - I love the imagery. It's so dirty and underground you just want to shudder. Poor Itachi, he's way to young for all of this. I love your writing style - the figurative language makes it so suspenseful.

Fav line:
"...someone's playing god or

maybe no one is no one at all Has anyone considered that? it's all just chaos and the world is spinning spinning out of control

wouldn't that be brilliant?"

And many more... awesome job!