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Nao-sama
2009-10-28 . chapter 1
I absolutely loved this. You've managed to get into Shizuru's head in less than a page, and I really felt for her.

It's impressive that you have enough of an opinion on her character to predict that forgiveness from Nao would actually be harder than antagonism from Nao. Oftentimes, authors put too much emphasis on external, rather than internal, conflict. And in this case, I think you're right. If Nao has forgiven Shizuru, the weight of her actions are pushed entirely onto her conscience and her pride. Not an easy thing to shoulder.

I know this is such a sterile and overused request, but it would really make me ecstatic to see you do a sequel on this. You have some interesting ideas about the characters, interesting enough that you've already got me hooked. I'd love to see the rest of Shizuru's healing process according to Annwyd.

Keep up the good work!
Kevin
2009-10-28 . chapter 1
Complete? NO! This is awesome, though I cannot think of how much could be used as a plot of sorts to continue it, nevertheless this is a really good story.
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