hmm, interesting. What evil schemes will Ashfur do now?

good story, write more

*gasp* He died! And now he is in the dark forest! I knew he would go there. Good job. Write more!

That was kind of odd. I didn't even know when Ashfur caught Lionblaze. It seemed kind of thrown in after the fire. Well, still good. Just waiting for the Gathering!

WOW! i love ur story!
Plz write chapter 2. and 3. and 4 etc...
r jaypaw, hollypaw, lionpaw really leafpool's kits?

Well that was odd. Ashfur was really hysterical. What makes him think Squirelflight wouldn't tell Firestar he tried to kill him?
Now, I wonder after Ashfur dies if he'll come up ways for revenge from the dark forest (if you send him there)

Poor Ashfur. I kinda feel sorry for him. I saw for the other character, you put Darkstripe. Is he going to help Ashfur get revenge? Ooh! Suspensefull... Anyways, like it so far! Keep up the good work!

yes, an intriguing sequel. Hope to read more.

Awesome story!!