Wow! This is a great story. My only critique is that I didn't necessarily like hearing the same thing from both points of view because it got a bit repetitive. Other than that though I thought this was absolutely fantastic, it left my heart beating faster when I was done with it! Great job and keep it up :)

I didn't really like the format, but that's just personal preference, right?

I thought it was a very interesting story, and I really hope that you make it into more than a one shot. These characters deserve to have more than the tiny bit of back story we got here.

Whoa. That was pretty intense. Thanks for sharing your writing. Best of luck in the contest.

this definately a different darkward/dom edward than i'm used to reading about. great one shot! loved it!

Thanks for entering the contest. Best of luck.

-Darkward