Please drastically edit your long introduction. It comes across as very obnoxious. If you believe your story is "crap," why should I read it?

Wow, this was a really detailed chapter! Amazing! I don't like the sound of what Levina said...Please update soon! :D

ahah! YAY! ur back, back again,gain,gain! i was soo hapy wen that not a chapter thing wasnt at the bottem any more! i was like WOOTWOOT!any way i am loving corrin and i have to re read this story cause i am like forgetting wat has happened before and how they got so close this angers me any way thnx for pulling through.update soon!..pomeehgrraants

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you know what i despise? how all of a sudden schools become all about grades and marks...i mean i bring home a c my mom goes into a full blown fit! never mind that i actually learned something new so wat if i didnt understand everything! but when i bring home an A its a smile and gets thrown in the trash like everything else! dammit why must school interfere with what we love to do in life i mean its not preparing us for life not really...i mean what exactly is the point of dodge ball? i said before but school could go die in a ditch! i loathe it. hope u get time to write again with out the burden of homework weighting u down.

love the story.

sad. have fun!

You are a terrific writer, update when you can, we will be waiting.

my dear suffering soul, i know how you're feeling.i completely, utterly,vividly,truly, really understand.
*sighs

Alas! why do we have to endure the long and seemingly endless torture brought about by school? I guess that it is one of the many wonders of the universe that is better left unknown.

i still cannot understand why it is necessary. i believe that most of the things taught in school are not needed in life (such as Trigonometry, Algebra,Geometry..the list could go on forever). And why oh why does it have to be imposed upon unsuspecting and innocent humans such us ourselves??!

I know how terribly hard it is for you to go on hiatus (i feel the same way). But it is a sacrifice that is required of us... for our parents and our future. But i think, and i'm absolutely positive about it, that i will still find ways to constantly think of my fanfic. i know you would too.

No matter how much effort we put in trying to concentate in school, i know it is impossible. Because in our hearts, we would rather be reading/writing fiction.

And so, fellow sufferer, i end this message with a heavy heart and a depressed spirit. I hope we would be able to live until the day that we shall be able to break free from the constricting bonds of school and experience the rare and temporary freedom that it more commonly know as...

Summer.
Yours in Misery,
Aravis riddle.

PS: School sucks.

Love your fic!

Your Grumpy King chapter was adorable. I loved the whole Edmund scene and the reactions to the girl, Tawny.

Hilarious! The mental comment was great!

I am putting this fic in Closets of Narnia, a fan fic community for great fics.

Nice job!
Edwina

uh...I'm sad about Tawny.
She seems to be really scared to get back to Calormen.
If i were her, I would not also get back to that place.

Nice job master!



Your avid-est fan

U.P.D.A.T.E. plez (: eat some snickerdoodles.

hope you update soon:)

thnx for the agese by the way! :D

love it!
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i so much wish it were to be real! narnia i mean. it makes me soo sad and frusterated wen people tell me theres no such thing as other worlds and magic i feel like going up to them and smacking them till there nothing but jam! but if i were to be wrong that would be very regretting(though i hope im not). your stories help though, there great and i can tell u care for what u write because of how totally awestruck they are! luv reading them plez continue.

luv,
like imma tell u my real name but this will work, ur number 1 fan.