is that the last chapter?
if not please write more.
I hope Alvie feels so much better in the morning.
maybe in the next chapter Brittany could ask Alvin out on a date.

I'm still Coraline Jones is the Best, I just changed my name.

Oh, good! Finally, evil Leonard is getting arrested! :D

Great!

Good! Dave finally called the police, and the cops have told him that Leonard has been arrested!

I feel so bad for Alvie, his head hurts and he's sleeping all the time. I think the doctors should have another look at him, I also think that Dave should put Alvie in therapy.

I hope that Leonard stays in jail this time, and that the next sequel has Alvie getting better. I know that abuse isn't something you just "get over", but I miss my bright, confident hot-headed Alvie!

Please update soon!

I love your story so much that I want to help you in the next story if you want me to

I hope Alvin will be okay, after all he's been through.No one need to have any relatinves like the boys' Uncle Leonard.

love it.you are a gret person and i love your work.from the one and only...KAYLEE.

i have an idea. it is sorta funny but people love laughing at a seiros matter.Alvin could have to be treated like a baby for a month or two.Then when he is back normal britney could hug him but not kiss though and alvin could have a big party on him being back to his normal hot headed self. At the end alvin could act cool and Britney saying i am going to tell the school paper about how you got treated like baby.Then alvin could yell NO.Thats my idea.i hope it helps.peace out.love and from the one and only KAYLEE... BYE.

that was awesome, thank goodness Alvie's better

Ah, ha... I feel stupid. Alvin got his memory back, didn't he? Must've forgotten (oh, irony). Still, that would've been useful. Well, your story. Update whenever! :3

Hm... To start the next chapter, maybe use Alvin's amnesia against him. Let Leonard tell him things that aren't true. But it's all up to you.

Now, my review.

Grammar needs work. Periods are missing. Speaking does not need "Dave said" or "Leonard said" after each line. Re-read with a close eye when you're done.

I like the idea of this story and the last; could provide great family/friend and strength moments. However, it's a bit weak there. Why aren't Simon and Theodore more involved? More concerned? Do you plan to use them at all later in the story, or is this a father/son fic? I only ask because the three brothers are, well... brothers. They have a natural bond, made stronger by all that they've been through together. In a story with such vulnerability involved, the brothers true love should shine.

Strength is lacking. Why didn't Dave kick Leonard out the moment he got there? I could say because they're brothers, but if Dave didn't even know that he had done this before, they couldn't have been very close ones. Even if they were close, Dave wouldn't put Alvin in danger like that. Again.

The storyline for this one doesn't deviate much from A Nightmare Reality. Dave, Simon, and Theodore leave. Leonard finds Alvin. Alvin is scared. Alvin is beaten. They come home. They freak out. They do it again. Again. Mrs. Miller gets involved somehow. Ambulance. Hospital. Confrontation.

Again, relating back to strength. The confrontations between Dave and Leonard hardly feel like confrontations. It's more like Dave is annoyed.

The writing could use some more description. You're telling more than showing. "It was three. It was dark. It was..." Metaphors and similies add colour to writing. Be a poet. Describe how Alvin is feeling. Not just "he was scared." Try fitting into his mindset. You've been abused. Every little noise sets you off. Your sleep is plagued with nightmares. Showing how he feels instead of telling makes the reader conclude that yes, he is scared.

Every writer has their style, their individual voice; I understand that. Be poetic, don't be poetic. Experiment. See what feels right. Just try to add a bit more depth. Shake things up a bit. Don't lie the words down like bricks, only there to get your point across. Add detail. Treat the words as paint strokes. Take your time. Keep a close eye. They'll reward you with a strong, yet beautiful story.

I know this review is negative, and that you're not too keen on them (what writer is?), but I only write this to help. I want to see all writers flourish. Constructive criticism is worth far more than "great".

One thing I really did like, though: Alvin getting amnesia. Thought that was a fresh breath of air. It can be used for many situations, so take full advantage of it.

I await the next chapter, whenever you feel like it. ^^

when are you going to put chapter 8 up because i want to know if alvin is going to be ok and this story is geting to be good keep up the good work

I am so glad that Alvie got his memory back, I loved that scene with Miss Miller holding Alvie after he had another nightmare. I also loved it when Dave held Alvie and apologized for letting Leonard crash with him again. I hope that Dave calls the police ASAP!

I got a good idea for the next chapter, have Leonard try to break into Miss Miller's house and have Leonard get kayoed by her. Having bad ol' Uncle Leonard get clobbered by an old lady, that would be awesome! Some interaction between Alvie and his brothers would be great as well. They really haven't had much interaction in this story.

It really hurts to have someone as bright and confident as Alvie to be so wounded and afraid. I know that abuse isn't something you just "get over", but it still hurts. I hope that you end this story with Alvie getting therapy to get better. Just a thought

Umm, I have an idea on how you could start the next chapter. Leonard cold stow away in Dave's car when Dave goes to see Alvin again and finds Alvin sleeping, wakes him up after Dave leaves and...Well, can ya figure out what I'm sayin? I hope you consider it. ^-^

Great Chapter! I really like that Alvin got his memory back. Now, once Dave calls the police, Leonard can go to jail., but he may not go down without a fight.

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!