This story was a good story, but it shouldn't have ended like that. It has gotten me thinking and feeling a bit detached, though I do love this story.

Nice! :)

Very nice, well-written one shot. Nice twist on how Bella becomes a vampire...though it is sad she kills her parents. It fits the story, though. Have you thought about expanding it?

Really enjoyed reading this. :)

O my god! You have to keep updating this story!

I can tell this is gonna be one of my favorite stories on FF!

Please update soon!

This is really great and I have read it several times since I stumbled upon it. I wonder if you would make it into more than a one shot? I would love it if you did.

This story is really awesome! CAn you please write more?

that was really good...hope you plan to extend it another chapter or two...i would love to see more

No, no, no, no.

NO.

You have GOT to continue this. You MUST. It's got the potential to be something amazing.

I adore EYES ON FIRE and know that you're pretty busy with that one. But please do seriously consider exploring this as a full story. It's simply magnificent.

ENCORE!

you should really continue this its so good! please make it a short story! ]

I really liked the story. Do you ever think about writing Edward's view? Or making a short story out of it?

I think you did very well at capturing this alternative look at how Bella could have become a vamp. I admit I was astonished when it ended; I wish you'd included more detail after they met. I know they were instantly attracted and the die was cast when they saw each other; but it still felt a bit lacking in reasons *why*. Despite that, your composition was quite flawless. I'd like to read more. :)

I've been reading Eyes on Fire, and I decided to check this out. It's good, and would be even better if expanded. Maybe you should think about that bc I have a feeling you could make it a great story.

I would love to see more from this world! Keep up the good work

Aw I really liked this story!