Waow...that is so GREAT!! I love your description about Shion and his longing about love, it's so beautiful. I love the chapter Albafica also. Please continue soon with Asmita, he's one of my favorite of all time. =)

Not bad for a first fan fic. The description was nice but you need better grammar to refine it. One more note: for you fan fiction summary sentence, while I have no problem with you mentioning this was your first, you need to describe what this story is about. Let people know this involved "The Lost Canvas" and the goldies.

Or even better, take your summary sentence, stick it as an "A/N (author's note) in the fic itself and use that valuable summary space to tell the readers what this story is about.

I agree with Intensify and bring out the Taurus Saint. I loved the part where he gave Kagaho a lesson in respect.

It is a good idea except you have mistakes in your grammar, sentences and you're missing a few words.

Like for example: The young Pisces was standing high above training ground.

It should be like this: The young Pisces was standing high above the training ground, watching the youngsters being trained by their tutors.

Also, you wouldn't say Let his soft hair billow with the wind cuz that doesn't make sense well to me.

It should be like this: The wind caressed his soft locks, casting it to the side, while seeing his rose petals flow into the air, heading upwards toward the blue sky.

I'm just trying to help you. I'm not saying you should stop writing, on the contrary, you should continue.

Like I said before, good idea and I want to read the next one. Oh, and I thought Regulus was trained by Sisyphus not Yato. Oh and you should do Aldebaran aka Hasagard(I don't know if I spelled his name right). Well, if you want.