nice story! you have to lay off of the food before bedtime, thoguh.

It was a good story, but I must say, there are quite a few inaccuracies. One, there could have been a LOT more detail in it. You could've made it into a ten thousand word document instead of a 1500 or so. Also, the way you centered the whole story makes it a hell of a lot harder to read. Another thing; when somebody new is talking, like if Chuck was talking and then Amelia started talking, a new paragraph is started. That was like 4th grade writing 101. And why is the cellphone able to work? Why does Todd have a cellphone? Why is Todd in a Hawaiian shirt and whatnot? You also spelt Chucknician wrong. There is no hyphen. And what the hell do you mean by "sorry to anyone whoe tries to find this story using Chuck B.?" There is no Chuck B! There's Amelia B. Chuck and Amelia are not married, as much as you want. Chuck Campbell is his name, as most of us have guessed by the fact that Chuck is also the actor's name and the last name could probably be Campbell. I tihnk that you could easily rewrite it or have one of your friends that I read about on your profile write it. Thanks for reading this and I hope you take my advice.

That was really really really freaky, out of character, a lot, but still good. Not great, but good