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Reviews for: Slayers Reversed
cyberimp6
2009-11-06 . chapter 1
The writing style needs a bit of polishing. Granted, explanations are some of the hardest things to write, but "When it was ready, they ate what was there and then went to sleep" just seems too pedestrian. Maybe they could have had a quarrel over who got to eat how much fish?
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