Wow, nice writing :) love the new character you created... I'm assuming she is based on you? :) she reminds me of Toph, with the whole parents thing :) anyway, love the story and I await for an update :)

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Pinkflower101

Okay, Hi there. I have a few things about your stories, so let's get started.

The POV was downright confusing. What is "UPOV" it doesn't make any sense. And what POV is it in when it's not this "UPOV". Also, I could swear I've seen this story at the top of the CL section three times or something, and I know there hasn't been any chapters, so update it, kay?

I'm not trying to be rude, but this story is pretty confusing. If you maybe get a beta or someone to help you with this, and if you played your OC right in future chapters, it may have potential. But seriously, if you plan on continueing this story, you need to play your OC perfectly, which means, even though she has a horse and such, you have to take her slow. And if you follow advice that everyone gives you, it might get there.

You were very discriptive though, which was very good. You created this night time scene very nicely. That's a good trait for authors to have.

And change your summary. It told me nothing about your story, besides that you are review hungry, and don't want flames. People will read your story and reviews if you put time and effort into it and it's summary. I know you don't want anyone to be mean, and I'm not yelling at you or anything, but you should want to improve and put time into every aspect of your story too.
-SeeMeInTheShadows