I'm impressed & looking forward to the next chapters.

I really like the story, but (and I hope you don't mind a bit of constructive criticism as some do) I feel almost as if it's a bit rushed, and I'm having a bit of trouble keeping up with the plot. Just, I think perhaps if the events could be expanded upon and explained a bit more. I plan to keep reading though.

It's great. Its marvelous. Oh please don't come Diamond Fires

Honestly, guys, you're scarier than the evil little fishies in the 3D movie we watched.

The cute fishies all "Glub glub" Minding it's buisness, and the evil fishy is all hiding and you know it's comming but you don't know when, and then the evil fishy is just "HAWM. NOM NOM NOM." And then my adopted son starts crying. ):

That's how you are. You're the evil fishy and I'm the little boy in the audience who knows something bad is going to happen and wants to close his eyes but doesn't and then you go HAWM and then I start crying. Because, you know, you are the fish and I am the little boy.

But, all in all, good story guys!

This story is quite wonderful and I would be jubilant if you would post again with a new chapter. Thank you. XD

Dang, Sarah/Eden, you be rockin'.

Pretty wonderful. Quite good. Cool.

holy crap this is realy great. I toatly love it
only one little thing though, i found it a bit confusing especialy the switch between people without any kind of seperation
keep it up [B

-nymph

I love it! <3 <3 Please update soon!The story is so exciting!

Wonderful. Thank you for these two chapters

Indeed good