Incredibly sexy. I feel angry at Jordan, but sad for her as well.

Jordan is so frigging selfiish! I can't wait for the next chapter ^-^

That last part was HOT! This is getting pretty intense and I can't wait to see where this is all gonna end up!

Oh, this was just great! Some full on awkward-grinding slash is what the doctor ordered! Can't wait for the next chap!

Awesome chapter, can't wait for more! I love the character developement and the gradual progression of JD and Perry's relationship. It makes sense that it's this slower more intense build-up, and I absolutely love how you've written the kids! Great work!

wow... I'm off to take a cold shower ;p

Ok you know I said last chapter was hot...that was nothing compared to this chapter. Your writing style is great

*fans myself* I didn't expect this to be so hot (in a good way)

Oh Perry's starting to like JD hehe I like the scenes between Elliot and Jordan as well

Wow JD is grim in this fic, can't say I blame him though haha

This is an interesting start, poor Perry and JD!

I can only assume that you have children of your own, or at least children you are frequently taking care of, because oh man do you write awesome kids. They're not just adorable in that kiddish way, they're also really obnoxious in that I'm-glad-I'm-not-their-mother kind of way, too.

I also happen to have mad, irrational love for this line: "Perry could practically see the lightbulbs flickering in JD’s head, blinking across his face like dying stars."

And another really cool thing? As gay as JD totally is, he's actually straight, and I love that you portray that so well in here. (Between all the insults to his masculinity, of course.)

I read this chapter last night, but it's taken me until now to solidify from the puddle of liquid your story melted me into. I mean, honestly! Could that chapter have been any hotter? And there wasn't even sex involved. Sheesh.

Seriously though. This chapter blew me away. I like how you continue to keep everything realistic from the very beginning, with Jordan's doubts and the verbal battle she had with Elliot because she wouldn't disclose what was worrying her. It's very in character for Jordan to seek out misery - not because she wants to be miserable, but because it’s something familiar to her. She finally has a good thing with Elliot, yet she finds herself falling back into her usual tendencies. I really hope they figure it out, because their relationship together is equally as interesting as JD and Perry's budding one.

Which, of course, moves me on to the next state of affairs, mentioned only briefly above. JD and Perry. Guh. Like Jordan and Elliot, I think you kept both of them perfectly in character. Or, well, as in character as two damaged souls could be, that is. Perry is much the same as we're used to seeing, but JD's change of character is both remarkable and worrying at the same time. I adore the banter between them, and how, instead of getting offended at Perry's insults, JD gives as good as he gets for once. Again, kudos on keeping everything realistic. Perry and JD wouldn’t have a tearful reunion, unless the tears were from the screaming children, but JD’s return wasn’t without emotion. I love the subtle things, like the fact that Perry kept – and was even wearing – JD’s hoodie. The way you hinted to the anguish Perry had gone through when JD was gone was both touching and sad, as the mental image of Perry keeping the last remnants of JD with him filled me with both happiness (at the fact that there is obviously something between them now) and sadness (at the fact that Perry had become so damaged and dependable).

The, ahem, physical activities between both of our boys was amazingly well-written. While I fully embrace my own sexuality, sometimes I come upon a story that just makes me shudder from its descriptions, be it not written well or far too descriptive. You, however, have provided the perfect mix between description, observation, action and emotion in allowing JD and Perry to explore one another. The bittersweet nature of their relationship transformed into intense heat, and continued to rage even after they were spent. I love that Perry did the dumb, impulsive thing for once and allowed JD to sleep over. I have a feeling he’ll keep doing dumb things because of his Newbie – JD just makes people do things like that.

Something that really irked me, however, was Jordan’s insistence that she should know who Perry is with. Like Perry said, it’s none of her business. But is that a bit of conflicted feeling on her part, I wonder? Perry is her instable stability – the person she always falls back on, regardless. There’s always that disappointment that rises when you realise you’re settling with somebody, and maybe she’s feeling a bit of that with Elliot, especially after their fight. I do hope that they work things out, whether I’m spot on in my predictions or completely off track. This is such a compelling story, and I couldn’t stop reading if I tried. Which I wouldn’t.

In saying that, I really can’t wait for the next chapter, and to see how the story unfolds next. I’m practically bouncing out of my seat. You’re a brilliant writer, and this story has so much potential.

Until next time,

x

OHMY**INGGODYES!

This chapter was simply just so cute and the Cox/JD interaction was just so...perfect. I loved both their reactions and thoughts when they were going at it. Jordan's reaction to seeing JD in Perry's house with his tee on was just so damn satisfying and made me grin the biggest **-eating grin I could possibly muster (thank you for that). I love you for updating so quickly and keep the wonderful chapters coming.

now I'm going to go back into a "squee'ing" mess

I love how this story is progressing. Can't wait to read more ^-^