just...weird. that's all i have to say. just weird.

Kool I loved this very original story plot never read one with a dark ash but I like it.

The whole dark and Light thing had me thinking of the black and white series[I dont know why though?]

The beginning of the story seemed kinda rapeish to me when dark forced 'light'to give him a blowjob sorry if thats not what you where implementing but that was my view point on it.

Everything else was greatto me and did Broake and Dawn already know what was wrong with ash?or did they just figure it out when ash left?

Riku16OuTώ

Ps:Spread love not legsз

DARK used RAPE! It was SUPER EFFECTIVE!

Foe ASH fell in love!

Wait... what?

WAIT. How did he get into the bathroom if it was locked? I would figure it would be hard to manipulate the delicate operations of a lock without being able to see them, using one's telekinesis dark aura thing.

Ash should have said: Dark, return!

What a narrsacist (did i spell that right?) XD but besides that it was a pretty good story for this concept.

Sexy Malevolentshipping! I loved this!

Huh.

I guess I'm no longer a pure Palletshipper- this looks like a really interesting ship. :)/:(

Outside of the lemon, this is a very solidly-written fic. If you tweaked the story a little, this could become a multiple-chapter story. i.e. why does Ash let an evil spirit reside in his body? I know he's dumb, but its not like 'Dark' offered him power or anything like with Quirrell and Voldemort... but whatever.

Keep it up! :)

sweet i love this story adding to *favs*

i love malevolentshipping. :)

that is epic! It almosted poned masigno!

You have a mind almost as pervy as mine

You write good, my friend. Such thoughts you have; they're evil. I love 'em! XD

And to generalize, this story rocks!

I'm actually surprised how much I liked it. I hadn't expected Dark to be in the story (I immediatly rembered the refference) and he ended up being a very cute, likable, yet evil person; which, also, I can totally see as being Ash's opposite.

I really, really liked the story - even though I don't normaly read these kinds of things... -

*Blushes*

Sorry. This review is long. But, anyway, I really liked it. And I hope you'll make, maybe, a sequal to it - Maybe not a Lemon, but something just as good. Oh, wait. I havn't checked to see if there is one. Anyways, good story! Make more!

Nice Catch! - You probably won't get that...

I you've got some time, could you please make a sequel? I really think this story deserves a sequel (Preferable a threesome with Gary or maybe even Richie or a grown-up Max, well maybe not a sequel but another story with Dark), so I hope you write one soon.

i think this is a one shot but please continue it i would love to see the adventures of these two