Pair Alex/Nash together,and I'll be EXTREMLY loyal,and greatful,and read ALL your stories!AND tell AL my friends about you!

PLEASE!

Hey! Just wanted to let you know that I love this story so far! And... to all the flamers out there flaming it because its Yaoi... learn to overcome your ignorance. Also it's AU... and it's called Artistic License. See; thats the funny thing about fanfiction... you can do whatever you want!

Celestial Demoness

Ugh! I thought this story had potential...that was before I read this horrible chapter.

Several things to improve. (But I doubt that even these could salvage this story)

1. Making Luna homosexual is VERY unrealistic. Without realism, your story loses any depth it once had.

2. Making characters OOC. This pretty much ties in with no. 1, but Alex is OOC too.

3. Better grammar. A two-year old could write better than this.

4. More description. I couldn't picture any of this in my mind.

Whats up with this more please Alec needs to have an adventure its in his blood hes a wanderer so hurry up and give him something to wander to And lets get TEMPEST into this quickly after all Luna is with Phacia. So hurry and Update PPLEASSSE!

This is really cute I always wondered what happened after please continue soon.

Okay...this sucked. As if everyone being out of character wasn't enough, you turn Luna into a lesbian (!) and make her Phacia's lover. And then you make Luna the source of Alex's depression even though he ventured through a lot of shit just to rescue her from Ghaleon.

Ok, so Luna is a lesbo now. Great. Are you writing a story or just trying to offend people?

DO continue, this is a very fascinating about turn from the usual Alex/Luna pairing (giggle) can I bribe you for more? I want to read the next one, please? (puppy dog eyes)

No offense, but this was out of character. Luna would never try to stop Alex from doing what he wanted to do. And the entire point of the Lunar:SSSC story was saving the love between Alex and Luna. Writing a story where Luna is the source of sadness for Alex destroys the whole theme of the story. Not to mention the continuity error it creates because in Lunar: Eternal Blue, there are several references to Luna and Alex living happily together, including two from Luna herself and a few from Nall. Why are so many people obsessed with writing fics that aren't true to the characters or the story?

I liked the story line. I wish you would continue it. This is the first fan fic I have read about Lunar and liek how you have incorporated the dragons. Looking forward to reading more.

This story intrigues me and I plan to continue to follow it and see where its going. I like the use of the dragons-most people forget them-as well as the idea of where they came from.

Alex seems quite in-character here, so ignore some of the less than intelligent comments you have _

Suggestions: check spelling and drop the 'Mission Impossible theme.' The song you put in was a good one, but to just say 'the MI theme begins to play' reads kinda awkward.

Questions? Hit me with an email. Seriously, nice start! Keep it up and ignore the peanut gallery!

*twitchs and falls over lauphing* an intresting reveiw. Hate to burst your bubble though but no I'm not going to do that to get him outta of his depression. I don't write Lemons very well.. heheh. *smirks* But As and AU I just might if it'll get you mad enough. The warning was there you didn't have to read it!

Wow. Just what the world doesn't need-another friggin' Lunar Yaoi starring the green-eyed sex pot himself, Alex. Please people! Get a life! NONE of the characters in the game where in any way gay. Oh, and let me guess...the way to dig Alex out of his depression is to have him be anally ravaged by Tempest. Oh wow. How original. Here's an idea-lets think of a PLOT before we write a story. Better yet, if Yaoi is all you can do, don't waste our time. Here, I can sum all yaoi up for you in three sentences: Boy wants boy. Boy whines about wanting other boy. Boys have sex.

(oh, by the way: five bucks says the author fits the typical yaoi writer profile and is a very lonely female with no sexual experience whatsoever.)