I like this...short and beautiful.

"Oh!"

I love a short, but well compacted story and you've accomplished it with this little tidbit. Awesome job. Oh, and though I've only read a handful of your original material, I agree with your friend. Keep on writing.

-Jae-

short but good.

Short yet nice.

Keep the good writing.

This story spoke to me in such a way that most stories do not. It has a beautiful rhythm to it that makes me yearn for more. I truly am interested in how this story will unfold. You have certainly caught my interest with the beauty of your words. Please update soon.