i love this story

You should really put this as complete.

In Japan, Lightning is considered an element. good story, I love all your work.

Ok, I would normally just pass this by, but you were wondering how that is spelled. it's schizophrenic. I checked.

Sorry, I just wanted to tell you in case you still care. It's also been referred to (?) as DID, or Dissociative Identity Disorder.

okay. i'm not sure where to start here. I'm really not trying to flame you, just giving some constructive criticism. PROOFREAD! I really dont think that you are reading what you are typing. Have you even thought out the whole story line? Draco Malfoy has been a bad guy/pain in the butt this whole time and now - BOOM - he's suddenly friends with Harry? That doesnt even make sense. This storyline is getting very difficult to follow. It feels extremely rushed. Like some things are just thrown in for no reason whatsoever, such as Malfoy suddenly becoming a good guy. Slow down. Flesh out your story. Every single idea you have doesn't need to go all in one story. In the first of this trilogy you gave Harry a "magical illness" that was supposed to go through him then the entire magical world. That lasted all of, what, 3 sentences. What was the point? What is the point of making Draco suddenly best friends with Harry? I could understand if something had happened and Draco had second thoughts of being a junior death eater, but you've just made it happen with, sorry to say it, absolutely no thought as to why.

I'm off to finish this story then I'll put a full review at the end.

Now Professors Lupin and Hagrid will both be teaching Care of magical Creatures, both of them have other things they need to do so they’ll be switching on and off all year. Professor Figg, who many of you may know from last year, will be teaching Defense Against the Dark Arts. Remus Lupin will be her co-teacher as Mundungus Fletcher will be your Care of Magical Creatures teacher.

Read that paragraph again. How can Lupin and Hagird both be teaching COMC in one sentence then Figg and Lupin be co-teaching DADA and Dung be teaching COMC in the next sentence? Does not make any sense whatsoever. I understand if you dont have a beta, but as much as I like the storyline, the proofreading is horrible. This is just one example of things that havent made any sense.

Love the story.

Your first story was good, but this one is sorta crap like you just wanted to get the chapters out without prove reading!

it is also to sappy!

I like ur other stories much better, it shows that you have dedicated more to to them

keep writing :D

please label as completed story

Nice sequel, though there were a few consistency errors I pointed out in earlier reviews. I'll look for the sequel.

Harry is definitely a Mary Sue (or Gary Stu [wikipedia]). He's powerful, smart, always right, noble, brave, always does the absolute best at everything he does, etc. The only bad thing about himself is that he overworks himself, though it's also annoying that his power level seems to randomly fluctuate sometimes with no or little reason or warning (them lamenting the fact/ Harry being happy at being normal/ enemies gloating).

I guess Sirius could also be one. I can't think of anything he made a mistake on besides stuff not his fought. He did get injured once.

No one else Mary Sue-ish really had much of a personality added to them.

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lol witty

Fred and George are no longer students of Hogwarts. Why are they still on the Quidditch team? And why would it matter if Lee had a sore throat? He graduated last year didn't he?

Maybe I made a mistake and they are in 7th year, but then why did Harry and co. Give Fred and George the end of the year to prank? I was under the impression that they were to go out of their last year at school with a bang. And why would Fred and George be in the Order of the Phoenix if they were still in school, and how would they have fought and been injured in Venice?

Earlier in this story Dumbledore said that the first Quidditch match was Gryffindor VS Hufflepuff, but Harry mentions to Snape in this chapter that it's Gryffindor VS Slytherin. Please fix it, whatever the first match truly is.

great story i cant wait to read the sequel.

uhm...didnt lucius die..? by means of decapitation? and draco received a letter nd black...raven? or owl? forgot. but yeah...uhm. ahwells.