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| THE-BANNED-AUTHOR 9/23/12 . chapter 1
Aw ain't that sweet...PETE AND CHARIS SITTING IN A TREE K-I-S-S-I-N-G
| Ossa 12/7/09 . chapter 1
Thatwas awesome; fun to read and reasonably easy to follow. Yay! There's a new ship in the Society.
You need a beta; your grammar is a bit incorrect at times, and you used "loosing" instead of "losing" at one point. I'd also tentatively add that you could do with a touch more description in places.
Aside from that, it was fantastic and I'd love to read more.
| Ulera 11/17/09 . chapter 1
wow, that genderbender is somewhat disturbing, but all in all this was a very good story, if you want to use either of my characters in your project go right ahead.
| Hakurei Ryuu 11/17/09 . chapter 1
lol. that was really cute. great sue-catching fic, and i loved the bits at the end too, though the kiss felt a little sudden and rushed. i honestly had NO idea what i started with the group-photo fic, but it seems like it's going well! XD question though: you said you needed the capital letters for something else instead of Emotion Marcus, but i didn't see anything there. will it be in a future fic or something?
GRAMMAR NAZI MOMENT: i'm sorry, but i've developed a problem with your use of commas. you use way too many of them to break up sentences in all the wrong places, and it makes the flow of the story really choppy and irritating. this is concrit, not flaming, so could you please work on that? it'd make your stories infinately better and easier to read in my opinion.
sure, i'd love to be in the specials! my brother's a fan of Jeff Dunham, so i can't wait to see what you come up with!
| Here for the Twister 11/17/09 . chapter 1
Whose Line Is It Anyway? Only the best show EVER.
*does puppy eyes*
Anyway, nothing much constructive to add other than yay for the shipping! I love a bit of Society romance, me.
| RedemptionWarrior 11/16/09 . chapter 1
It was rather good for a fandom that I don't know. No glaring mistakes that I saw. As for those last notes, I would like my Author Self to be in the special episode of "Whose Line".
| Drake Dragonsoul 11/16/09 . chapter 1
Jill and Marcie won the race. Now I have to wonder exactly what Anuhs was doing in that particular fandom.
You need to be more descriptive in your writing. Particularly the fight scenes, just saying that Marcus destroyed the Sue's rings doesn't cut it, a description of the act itself is needed for example.
| gdouglas56 11/16/09 . chapter 1
I have to say, you portrayed Doug quite well, but as a matter of fact is that he's not very good at hand-to-hand combat, and don't be too serious on callsigns. Other than that, Marcus did a good job at 'Priceless Kodak', now I feel another shipping coming along; but this is going to be a bit hard...So yeah, cheers mate!
| darkwebx01 11/16/09 . chapter 1
And the shipping begins!
*waves flag* Hey, wait a minute, this isn't the right flag! *replaces flag with correct one*
Anyway, great fic!
Tyler: I wouldn't mind being in either of those fics you mentioned...
Ignore my self-centered character.
| Mei1105 11/16/09 . chapter 1
Nice job mate - not familiar with the fandom but I still enjoyed it. A few issues with grammar that I noticed, mostly apostrophes, but I'm hardly one to talk on that front. Also as a general rule for writing, if you're going to use numbers, writing them out in full instead of using the digits is a little easier on the eyes for the reader, but its an authors choice.
(hums Charis and Pete sitting in a tree). More couples, more fun!
I saw the words "Jeff Dunham" at the bottom and I squealed (I love him) so I think you can guess what I'm going to ask.
Your next fandom is fine with me. Go for it!