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Wishbone the Lover of Books 7/27/11 . chapter 3
Aw, the ending is pretty sad. I guess all endings can't be happy ones, though.

Well, I had a great time reading this story. Good luck with writing the rest of your stories.

In terms of a review, only one word comes to mind: proofread (I hope that I'm not annoying you with bringing up proofreading over and over again; it's just that it is such an essential tool for all writers).
Wishbone the Lover of Books 7/27/11 . chapter 2
Great plot progression. I thought the ending was kind of sad, but that's why I'll keep reading to find out what happens in the end.

Once again, proofreading can be one of a writer's best friends.
Wishbone the Lover of Books 7/27/11 . chapter 1
Great chapter. I believe that you portray all of the characters' personalities well (I don't remember what Fiona's personality is like; I collected Sonic comics way back when, but I didn't own the ones that included Fiona). I like this story, enough to finish it in one sitting.

One thing that I could say is to proofread your story before you upload it (that, or ask someone else to proofread it for you). That way, tiny mistakes disappear, for the most part.

Keep up the great writing!
Metal Sonic EX 6/23/04 . chapter 3
I'd have to agree with T.J. That sounds like a winner. That or rebuild her. Anyways I think that someone *glares at Toni the Mink* should make a sequel using one of this criteria.
M-MonMarc 7/16/03 . chapter 3
M-Mon: *Sniffle* Why? WHY!

*Sobs*

Marc: Hey... M-Mon... Stop crying...

Sai: YOU'LL WAKE UP LUCEMON AND MERIK!

Merik: I'm awake!

Lucemon: I'm awake!

Both: MUWA HAHAHAHHAHHAHA!

Sai: *Sighs*

M-Mon: - Well..It was kawaii and beautiful while the LOVE lasted...
T.J 12/9/02 . chapter 3
One question? Why didn't Tails use the power of the Emeralds to have her as flesh and blood, or in her case, fur and blood?
Falconess 8/17/02 . chapter 3
Hi Toni!

This is really good! :) Poor Fiona, but I bet Tails could get her working again - he can fix anything! ;D
cherry 2/28/02 . chapter 1
Believe in Myself is Tails's theme song from Sonic Adventure.
cherry 2/28/02 . chapter 3
cool story
Brian Bloomfield 2/27/02 . chapter 3
Good story. Is Believe in myself another story you wrote?
Cherry Romancer 1/21/02 . chapter 1
Love this! You're fitting Fiona into the video game series very well. Please, I want to see more.
Knuckles95 1/18/02 . chapter 1
That was good! Can wait till the next chapter!
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