This is nice. I love the descriptions you give of the characters, especially the comparison of Arwen's hair falling from her braid flowing behind her, to a Meara's mane. Sometimes a reader gets weary of reading the same trite descriptions of the characters in the stories they read. I personally love it when an author finds new ways of describing things. Very nice job.

Rawr! It's not fair that you write such lovely fanfic! *evil eye* Poor Legolas, I can really feel empathy and maybe some of his misery through your writing. I really like Lego/Arwen pairings ... or anything unconventional cannon ... if you know what I mean :)

Nitpicks:

This is clearly not from the books, as Arwen did not and never would have, wielded a sword, in Tolkien's works. Neither was she blue-eyed-her eyes were grey.

I am a literary purist, but for the sake of objectivity, I will leave my deference to Tolkien's canon at the door. This reads as though it was deliberately intended as movieverse. For that reason, I would suggest that you make a note of this in your summary, by simply starting the summation with 'Movieverse.' There's no real need to do this, but it will help people who are searching for LotR fanfiction to be able to weed out the fics that follow whichever -verse they are not interested in reading. It will also help prevent you from getting flamed by people who are rabid canon-purists.

Now, as for the story: You do an excellent job of maintaining first-person tense throughout the short, and this is no easy thing to do. Kudos.

You are also very good at writing description. I was a little put-off by the brevity of each paragraph, but that is probably due to my having seen so many prose fics written in the form of 200 couplets, and has nothing to do with your own writing.

I also couldn't help but feel that the Arwen/Legolas thing was rather predictable, and that killed the reaction that your last line was supposed to evoke. Arwen/Legolas has been done so many times that, when slash and OC pairings are ruled out, that particular pairing is expected. For one thing, as canon-female characters go, there are not many for Legolas to choose from in Tolkien's world, and so Arwen is a fairly obvious choice. So even if the Arwen/Legolas pairing had not become dreadfully cliche as a result of 10,000,000 fanfics, it is still not terribly surprising to read a fic where Legolas reveals the woman of his heart to be none other than Lady Undomiel.

Story nitpicks aside, I like your style. I'll definitely be looking at more of your fics.

Terribly sad, yet very moving. I know that this is how Legolas feels for Arwen..but is Liv really good enough for Orli? ;)

Wonderful, Tyger! Poor Legolas, he doesn't have a chance against my Ranger...

This was beautifully written, and cheers for using established characters. Well done and very poetic. The paragraph beginning with "she moves like sunlight on water" reminded me of all those classical descriptions of beauty that are so praised.

I never...ever read Legolas romance fics that center around a female character *cough* Mary-Sue's *cough* and that's what I thought this was until I saw that big warning that said -and not a Mary Sue either- so I read it and wow! I love angst, and I love the way you wrote this! The dialogue sounds like Legolas, so I think you've got that part of his character down pat. Kudos to you!

Oh, and don't get me wrong, I don't mind Mary-Sue's...just not in the LotR fandom.

Is this done? Or are you continuing on? I think it works nicely just as it is; but if you, by chance, decide to go on, I'll definately read it! Which means, yes, this is going into my faves. .

hey, this is very beautiful! I like Arwen and Legolas pairing, but I am always faithful to canon, so i guess Legolas must had terrible time dealing with Aragorn and Arwen's love, yet remain true to their friendship. I am a believer in platonic love and heartbroken can only test what Arwen means to Legolas. did he truly love her? If he did., he must let her go to find her happiness. I am so glad you write this.

BTW: thanks for your wonderful review. You are a great writer yourself. :-)

Beautiful! I love everything you write, and this is no exception! There is a subtleness and majesty in this story, even though it's so short. Short and sweet.

I have erected a shrine in my backyard in your honor. I will worship at it everyday. Thank you for brightening my existence with this beautiful fic.

Oboebyrd

B: *sniff*

C: I always thought they made a good pair...poor Lego...

B: It's good! Write more!

I normaly don't read fics like this, but I LOVED IT! It was really sad, but kinda happy at the same time... yeah... I suck at descriptions of good fics. But it was good.

i know what u mean...i LUV the way legolas shoots...

and just 2 tell u...i luv les miz :)

That was very nice. I like the way he describes his feelings. It was actually sad, though. Poor Legolas! We just like him so much we want everything to be perfect just for him (hahahaha) I think you are very talented. Keep up the good work!

P.S. I will read your StarWars fics. I am also a great fan ;)

Oh! So sad! But it's beautiful. I'm glad it's not like this in the books (as far was we know). Poor Legolas! You're very talented, though!

"How can I let go of someone who I never had in the first place?" -your fic reminds me of a phrase a friend of mine said..

this is nice.. sweet even.. the first fic i read of this pairing is unfinished! and now this is a great read.. keep writing!