Awww, Satoshi-sama! *cries*

Vixie: It's mean of you to do that. So mean.

It's such a sweet story though! Especially when he makes Krad bang his head on the table!

Vixie: And when he pulls his hair.

Sad it had to end in death.

aww...*sniff*

Poor Satoshi...it fits so well. Sounds a lot like Krad as well. Everyone was pretty much fully in-character :)

aw...*cries in corner*

Wow. Good story. But sad too. I like it.

Krad is perfect. i can totally see him doing that, getting someone to fall in love with him then offing them.

So. .. not to be a complete jerk, but there were two grammatical mistakes I noticed. (Don't be offended! I'm an English major)

The first: This land used to belong to my family’s. (it should be just "family".)

The second:He feel backwards (it should be "fell"

Otherwise, great work!