May I ask why everything is in bold, italics and underlined? These features should really only be used to emphasise occasional words.

Rather than writing *character name* "Speech" you should write

"speech" said character name.

Said is one of the unobtrusive words in the English language and you must not be like a long winded victorian author and fear overusing it.

May I ask if English is your first language? Because this has the potential to be a really good story, but you do need help with that grammar and syntax.

Yi San is one of my favorite dramas. So I am happy there is some stories for it.

Your story has potentail, However your writing style makes it hard to concentrate on the story with the * around the names and the 2 chapters feel rushed. And not enough descrption.

Shanda

;)

Nice story my sister-in-writing. This is so sweet. Love Cho Bi's way of thinking.

Go Dae Su/Cho Bi couple.