interesting story-line

I just finish reading chapters 1-6 and enjoy them all.

*Fallen Warrior

This was impressively bad. Yes your format has improved, but your skill is sorely lagging. You story is slightly more interesting that watching grass grow. You have no descriptions, you never show what happen, and the end of the chapter made me never want to read another fic by you. This story feels as if it was written by a third grader. You explain stuff that does not need to be explained. It is almost insulting.

I want to know why do you keep writing? Have you had one that more than three people liked? Have you have one where all your positive reviews did not come from the same person?

Anyway your story does not impress me and I wish that I could delete it for you.

I really can't believe I clicked this. At all. You seem to know next to nothing about Ranma, and I can't say anything about Winx because I don't know much about that... nor do I really care.

Your writing is painful to read. Absolutely painful, I'm sorry. I'm not going to say you should stop writing, but I will say this, learn the damn source material. Learn to show, not tell. And learn to keep people in character.

And learn to use dialogue properly. Stop using fanon damnit.

Sorry to say this, but you'll never fool me, with lies about betrayal.

Akane lovers have no rights to either support, or favor, the story Ranma Club by Frequent Reader, so remove it at once.

Oh, and by the way, I have told TheLordOfPages1692 to keep an eye on you.

yay they r here we

nice chapter

Your writing is a little rough, but ignore the flamers. You don't get better without practice, and your practice, is writing, and enjoying what you wrote for yourself.

Now that has been said; interesting story.

Great chapter and story so fair pleases continue the story soon.

Just get's lost, and then afterwards, you could just go and die, you b*y ASSHOLE!

Alright. Dialogue should be separated between lines. E.g.

"Hello. How are you?" Said Mook 1.

"Shut up." Person responded from his position dangling by a chain over a pit of lava.

You're using is a little too often. Try replacing a few of the 'second is's' in the sentences with the word are.

Didn't you read my review carefully?

And, I like Frequent Reader's story better, even if he doesn't believe in the good side of Azusa Shiratori.

I mean, I'm trying to help him get people to realize, that RanAka pairing, doesn't deserve to become canon, at all.

Stories with Akane works best if they're about her getting rightfully bashed, as a suitable punishment for all bad stuff that she's brought upon Ranma.

Why should Akane have powers for?

She's too stubborn and impatient to handle the great responsibility that comes along them.