Wow, this was heavy. Very well written though. I actually liked that there were no quotations. It gave the story...uuhhhh...something else that was different. Great job.

Great story. I love the curse you invented; it's just so dark and evil. It is just such a Death Eater like curse to cast: cause pain and suffering for a prolonged period of time, and leave yourself virtually without blame. Since the person cursed is the one to ultimately end their own lives, I would think it would be hard to trace, yes? I mean, most people wouldn't survive, and there wouldn't be much, if any, investigation. Plus, the incantation for it is fantastic :)

Loved the story!

Awsome story but it would have been nice to make it a wee bit longer and include more things such as what voldermort did to the death eaters when Harry wasnt killed and more about how everyone acted when harry was about to jump. The curse of guilt should be like an accual harry potter book and the curse should be built up over the year until it just explodes out of him and i dont think he should jump i think he should go down into the chamber of secrets and stabe himself with a basilisks fang and he should nearly die but Ron unlocks the chamber and fawks comes just after harry had done it. Somthing like that would have made for a more climatic story and a longer one.

I apologise if you belive this letter is stupid.

KEEP WRITTING

Hermione'e secret keeper

hey great story but i gotta agree with kei ikari. he would have and SHOULD have died

Awe c'mon, why did he survive? HOW did he survive? 13 floors in an ancient castle like hogwarts would cause him to hit the ground with about 22tons of force. That would've cause every bone in his body to shatter like blass no matter how he landed.

what can i say? loved it...loved it loved it loved it!

A good story. Very appropriate. I look forward to more completed stories from you.

(stares enviously at Harry and then at Hedwig before kidnapping the owl) AHAHA.

(coughs)

Time to say something relatively relevant.

I don't usually enter the Harry Potter fandom, but to be honest with you, I really enjoyed this. Certainly a hell of a lot more than Harry Potter Book 5.

Ah, he's back to normal now, I dread to think, however, what exactly happened to Lucius when Voldemort found out his curse had failed.

(covers her eyes and then cautiously peeks out before clicking fervently on the arrow pointing to the next chapter)

(bites lip) Uh oh...methinks there is some major angst on the way (braces herself gleefully, always a sucker for angst)

I wish there was some way the teachers would actually notice and take a wee bit of pity upon that boy. Especially Snape, horrendous little git that he is.

(shakes her head, pitying him)

I must say one thing though, your writing style is a hell of a lot like JK Rowling's writing. Hmm

Oh that Lucius...

makes me want to puke.

A fantastic bad guy though, really well done.