Did I ever mention how much I enjoy your work? Simply fantastic dark imagery, especially (again) with the sun and moon analogy with Yui and Miaka. Considering this is one of the few shoujo-ai pairing I think is somewhat plausible, I think you did an excellent job. Wonderful focus on the inner thoughts of Yui and her feelings for Miaka. I didn't notice any prominent grammatical or spelling mistakes (that could just be my own overlook, though) other than a few fragmented sentences, but I attribute that more to the style of the work more than anything else. _ Wonderful use of metaphors, vocabularly, and other such beautiful literary tools. A truly enjoyable piece of prose. Do keep on writing. _

What can I say? I love it, too? You're such a master of words...sighs happily Give more!