This was a really terrific story. Time travel is my favorite Sci-Fi subject and you handled it very well here - it was just confusing enough to be believable without making my head spin. An interesting take on Wilbur's future. Based on the beginning of the story, I never would have figured it would turn so dark towards the end, despite figuring out pretty easily that Cornelious would die. By the way, qudos for not making that or Wilbur's death permanent; I appreciate it. Great job!
I think I just got mind-effed ( I don't cuss, but man, if I did, I'd be spewing colors right now ). Great ending. Confusing though. And a little twisted I think...
But hey, that is the job of the author, is it not?
- Olivia
Calenture 3/7/12 . chapter 17
Insane. That's what I thought about the last 7 chapters or so. But I was so hooked I read it all in one night. Took me a good 4 hours, but it was worth it. I loved it. Well done friend.
Dude, up until the last of ch 9, you seriosuly had me bursting into tears several dozen times (people prolly think I have issues xD). Now I'm giggling and grinning like an idiot! Your writing is amazing, truly, truly amazing! The emotions and evertything are so real and heart felt! And you are great at writing time travel paradoxes. XD You had me lost and confused, in a good way!
You updated! :DD (I'm expotentially happy right now) Though, at this point, (not sure if I said this before) it's getting a little hard to follow with everything going on, but it's like how I used to read Alice's Adventures in Wonderland when I was seven and didn't really understand what was going on, but I could feel the wonder of it. And, though I do understand what you're actually trying to stress, who's who is getting a little confusing. But I love how you did the "so infinitely slow" part. Like I said, it's the wonder of it that really counts.
My, my, my. This story has one heck of an idea behind it. But, in the last few chapters, you've been executing it in a mangled fashion, it's almost hard to keep track of. Almost. It's still very good. But you chose two short a time spand to throw in all of your OCs. I was actually going to stop reading this altogether at chapter 12...but then I knew I had to review. And I couldn't do it then. But, now, you added a new hook, one, I must say, that is a surprising twist. However, I couldn't help but notice that your last update was back in January. So, is this story going to be continued? Or have you dropped it? I hope you pick it back up again, considering it's one of the best MTR fanfics I've read. (The rest are just overly perfect OCs that want to throw themselves at Wilbur.) And as for books, The Door Within trilogy is VERY good, as well as the Isle of Swords series, written by the same author. (I think his name is Wayne Thomas Battson, but I could be wrong.) There's also The Amanda Project, which I'm quite fond of. And don't worry, I'm not going to suggest *gag* Twilight.
Anywho, hope you continue to write, because you're very good, no matter if it's for or Harper Collins, I wish you the best of luck.
Oh I get it now... That was brilliantly written! I have to say. I expected it to be either Cornelius or Wilbur. Jeeze. Its sort of hard to keep up with how it goes but I love it anyways! What I wonder is... What happened to Cornelius? *gasp* maybe he's Emperor Soren? I was wrong in my last review so maybe not... Anyways! This is just perfect. I love it! Amazing author. :D
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